hermetic doors opened

By denver nitze

assume the position,
the one that best hides your face,
hidden in shadows
she hides her disgrace

unholy shadows
cloaking her shoulders
caressing the shell
once warm growing colder.

blood stained lips
are all she had to offer
to the darkness
through which he had sought her

carefully selected verse
annotation to a dark page
opened herself completely
let go she did her rage

put her heart on paper
sealed it with a kiss
never knowing all along
the one she loved she'd miss

lost within and lost without
carrion dreams turn to lust
reverie all day long
dreams turned to dust.

desert stockade
a barrier holding gap
two souls divided
void to the darkness tap.

lightning holds answers
and thunder responds
while oceans kept secrets
tears become ponds.

to love and not see it
to be and not know
to kiss empty air
and caress melancholy woe.

to find love is happy
but to hurt one is cruel
an angel sheds feathers
in falling they duel.

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Published on Sunday, March 2, 2008. Filed under: "Lyrics"

Comments on "hermetic doors opened"

On Wednesday, May 13, 2009, Huey Lewis (21) wrote:

This is pretty damn cool. Very. Makes me want to read more of your work. And I shall.
On Monday, March 3, 2008, Echoes of Orpheus (357) wrote:

I always enjoy pieces dealing with ethereal matters... Though this tops all of mine by far *salutes* Well written
On Monday, March 3, 2008, denver nitze (251) wrote:

thank you. i'm flattered. *bows* ~tangel
On Monday, March 3, 2008, Alanarchy (1168) wrote:

"Lost within, and lost without/Carrion dreams turn to lust/Reverie all day long/Dreams turned to dust" Awesome lines. Love to hear this with music. Feels like it calls for piano, the most. To me anyway. Either way, I dig it hardcore.
On Monday, March 3, 2008, denver nitze (251) wrote:

yeah, i'm totally picturing this one with a small strings section as well as piano and acoustic guitar. :) i still need to write a chorus though and edit it a bit. thank you for your comment. :)
On Monday, March 3, 2008, Alanarchy (1168) wrote:

If I were you, I'd choose two or maybe three little stanza's to treat as your chorus. So you don't sing the same lyrics for the chorus each time it comes around. I don't know about you, but too much repetition can ruin a song for me. It makes it boring.
On Monday, March 3, 2008, denver nitze (251) wrote:

i like that idea. i generally improv the chorus everytime just to keep it original, i just write one to have a hard song. very nice idea though, *grabs guitar* i'll let you know what i come up with. thanks. !tangel
On Monday, March 3, 2008, Alanarchy (1168) wrote:

Hope I get to hear it :)
On Monday, March 3, 2008, SGT Bloth (162) wrote:

God, I would love and hate to be those two right now...beautiful, painful...I can't wait for more... Bloth
On Sunday, March 2, 2008, GraveFlower (240) wrote:

*put her heart on paper sealed it with a kiss* ..the mind of a beautiful genious.....i love that i get the chance to be inside it for a split second,,,totally dig it babe,,,
On Sunday, March 2, 2008, denver nitze (251) wrote:

you are too sweet. thank you. *blushes*
On Sunday, March 2, 2008, Dancing_Monkey (1228) wrote:

It shines through that you are a artist of music.
On Sunday, March 2, 2008, Dancing_Monkey (1228) wrote:

This sings to me like layers of paint on canvas
On Sunday, March 2, 2008, denver nitze (251) wrote:

thank you. maybe i'll turn it into a song. *steals monkeys guitar and strums a few chords* i'm flattered by your kindness. :)