The Old Oak Tree
By cre
The night was dark as nights will be
When I found my way to the old oak tree
The air was heavy with unspent rain
And a lingering scent of age-old pain
The thundering rumbles from the distant hills
Lay draping my shoulders in a cloaking shield
Flashes of lightning ripped the darkened sky
Like the scenes of terror that pounded my eyes
The battering wind did steal my breath
But the tree stood tall and still as death
So still, more still than earthly trees should be
And in this stillness, beckoned me.
To the Tree
"I consider now in this converging
The truth I see in you emerging
A book you've surely come to be
Though press or print you've never seen
The tales penned deep within your heart
Have left on me their own vile mark"
(I stumbled here and fell to tears)
But refusing to give in to my chilling fears
I gathered strength and eyed the tree
And the crushing reminders of memories
The gashes winding round the base
Where chains had held a child in place
For reluctance to commit some ghastly deed
And cater to her captors' corrupted needs
Though far from visibile this night I saw
Splashes of tears from the times they'd fall
Mixing in a river of my streaming blood
Crashing to the ground and staining the mud
The ashes from the fires that burned so bright
Dotting the bark and obscuring the night
Leaving a tree that is scarred to this day
And branding the child in a similar way
(At this point I turned away)
The night still lay in its stormy shroud
And the thunder still crashed among the clouds
But I felt a change in the blowing winds
A shifting, and a knowing, and I saw it then
This place that had chased me through the nights
And filled me with unending fright
Was now just a tree, with its sad reminders
And I knew I had returned at last to find her
To unchain the child and set her free,
And make my peace, with the old oak tree.
Comments on "The Old Oak Tree"
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On Tuesday, April 6, 2004, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
SO beautifully expressed. Once again your imagery drew me into the experience. Overcoming the scars of your childhood was never so eloquently expressed as you did here.
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On Saturday, March 27, 2004, Solace
(1065) wrote:
Intense and indeed reminiscent of poe, a grandiose journey through visions and feelings...absolute symmetry of words...Aesthetic to the point of collapse...
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On Saturday, July 12, 2003, Demosthenes
(155) wrote:
im trying to go back and read all your mildly older works. its taking AGES. you just cant hurry through a cre poem, theyre too astounding. -B
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On Saturday, May 24, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
*slow exhalation* I am.... not quite sure what to say. You took me so completely through the window and iright nto this vividly painted scene. Great work. ~DW~
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A former member wrote:
This is a nice little puzzler. The whole child chained to the tree thing leaves you wondering if its a figurative, or literal, or both. Good poetry.
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On Thursday, May 1, 2003, liquid_emotion
(323) wrote:
what an incredible story that flows, and weaves, and trembles, and finally falls exhausted on calmer ground. Brilliant.
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On Monday, April 28, 2003, KittyStryker
(710) wrote:
very creepy... yes, i think the land around us remember things we cannot even picture... i wonder how the trees see things going on around them?.. very nicely written!
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On Monday, April 28, 2003, Jonas
(715) wrote:
once again you have taken my breath away... there are so many different ways to read into this poem, perfectly written...
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On Sunday, April 27, 2003, GothicBlack
(186) wrote:
ok so this was good... really good.. exceptionally GREAT in fact. I'm not sure what I can say though.. brilliant story... I loved it all. ~gothic~
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On Sunday, April 27, 2003, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
Again, jane, I hate you for writing so good. I love the ending, excellent job, I really reall really like.
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On Sunday, April 27, 2003, Aurora_Light
(472) wrote:
wow i realy like it in fact i love it. it's got a mystery around it that seems to draw me in
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On Sunday, April 27, 2003, Armand
(54) wrote:
very original, yet in a style reminiscent of poe - taking a mundame theme to a melodramatic level ... i've read this several times, but still think there is something going on that i am missing.