abuelo [tatuajes y memorias]
By Six-Out
you live in my hands
and when I speak your name.
I can taste the bitter.
ink.
they say- that there is beauty in simplicity.
and that when the world is breaking down.
the only falling apart you do.
is internal. flames like desire.
and it's never enough to just walk on hot coals.
when the sky is cracked.
with crooked picture frames. dusty sepia.slurish
mementos. is all i have left-
from the time you held my hand while they watched.
I wished I was a superhero that could freeze time.
but your fingers were cold enough.
so now. I re-collect the worlds you whispered.
when you spoke so clearly of life through intoxicated eyes.
and told me that letters would make me famous.
well. here I am. with my hair in my eyes.
sometimes- I want to be simple. instead of weaving
the complexities that I speak with pen and pad.
like this.
this isn't beautiful. so I'll rip myself open
in ways that infant eyes can comprehend. yes.
simply speaking.
[I miss you]
and they tell me that my words are like bullets.
while I'm still carrying you on my back.
willingly- I burn this burden.
and whisper myself to sleep with
a spoken lullaby.
'por lo menos puse seis hacia fuera'
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Comments on "abuelo [tatuajes y memorias]"
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A former member wrote:
Que poema tan mas bonito.
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On Friday, January 11, 2008, RequiemExMortis
(16) wrote:
Well, other than your sole use of periods in your poem, which confused me a little, I liked it very much. Good wording and good sense of emotion... sort of like you expected nothing less from the future than the bleak outlook written of in this poem. I feel very much the same way. Nice job... I think you've out-rated anything I've ever written with this one work.
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On Wednesday, February 28, 2007, Daughter_Of_The_Moon
(106) wrote:
You remind me of feeling's I have not felt for some time now. Beautiful is not the feeling of your write, but it is Beautifully written, as expected. -Heather-
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A former member wrote:
Veo las palabras que usted habla como cuadros en una pared. (did I say that right?)
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On Tuesday, February 20, 2007, Dei
(663) wrote:
You havent lost your touch,
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A former member wrote:
wow
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On Tuesday, February 20, 2007, Rachel
(210) wrote:
I know the feeling.
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On Saturday, February 17, 2007, Mahakala
(207) wrote:
You are absolutely wonderful...
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On Thursday, February 15, 2007, zanewill
(82) wrote:
holy mother of god>> this evoked an unexpected GUSH of breath leaving my body, yet attacking itself..>>> HOlymotherOFcHristoS>>> UR so wonderfuly eloquently intensely passionately>> profane & equisitely unique in the conjuring of wordplay...Excellent
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On Tuesday, February 13, 2007, PoeticHellion
(191) wrote:
There isn't much to say that isn't already said.
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On Tuesday, February 13, 2007, Bella Butchery
(696) wrote:
your words always leave me twisted inside, like a case of vertigo, but only in my stomach.... thank you
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On Tuesday, February 20, 2007, Bella Butchery
(696) wrote:
had to come back and read this again, my stomach is still spinning, makes me miss someone special
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A former member wrote:
Speechless, once again.
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On Saturday, February 10, 2007, carlosjackal
(2788) wrote:
"this isn't beautiful"..the situation you express isn't but the way you've used words to form this poem to express the situation IS beautiful. Oh, and stop driving that forklift like a fuckin' girl! :P
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On Saturday, February 10, 2007, sIo
(898) wrote:
this is HORRIBLE. oh my gosh. why do you even TRY anymore. distasteful and gross and icky and stupid and BLAH and ewwwww. gawh. stoopid monkey.
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A former member wrote:
hah! best comment ever...
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On Saturday, February 10, 2007, Arianna
(105) wrote:
*awed silence*
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On Friday, February 9, 2007, AniDayz
(812) wrote:
spoken...validated.heard...
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On Friday, February 9, 2007, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
Te adoro...this is beautiful.
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On Friday, February 9, 2007, verablue
(106) wrote:
no criticism needed, because it is 'good'. infact, i would go beyond 'good' and tell you that its absolutely beautiful. "I re-collect the worlds you whispered" you always amaze me.
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On Friday, February 9, 2007, Drea
(1388) wrote:
This reminded me of my grandfather. It made me remember things I thought I forgot. Thank you for that. Wonderfully written, Jon
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On Friday, February 9, 2007, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
I didn't write this for it to be seen as 'good'. I wrote this because I felt I needed to. So, comments are welcome, but no criticism, please.