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the break-up
By KittyStryker
“i'm sorry”
you said
well
i'm
actually
not
sorry
at all.
i saw it coming.
you took
her leaving you
out on me
as if conquering
my body
would bring her back.
and when
it didn't
you left me
alone.
you know
i think
i'd miss you
if i had seen you
enough
to have something
to miss.
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© 2006 Bast
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A former member wrote:
Damn. This is deep and blunt. Love it.
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A former member wrote:
When you are down to nothing, remember that you really have the power to make something out of nothing.
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On Friday, February 2, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm
(1703)
wrote:
"you took her leaving you out on me" - that line speaks volumes. Where are you? I miss reading your stuff and hope you are well. Ciao, T/S
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On Saturday, February 3, 2007, KittyStryker
(711) wrote:
I'm around, just not posting- no money to write. :/
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On Friday, October 20, 2006, urbanhumility
(1175) wrote:
proper in all aspects of the heart..........well spoken......urban
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On Thursday, March 30, 2006, flying_fox
(573) wrote:
Love the last stanza... it evokes a cool detachment with just the right amount of venom. I'm so sorry for your pain...
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A former member wrote:
is this true? Are you broken up? You are a hot babe and will real them in all the time. Plenty of fish in the ponds.
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On Thursday, March 2, 2006, KittyStryker
(711) wrote:
yup. Jared and I broke up. Well, I broke up with him. Oh well. And what's lame is- he said he was sorry, he was looking for a masochist? Who does he sleep with? A Dominant chick who hates pain. :/ So it goes...
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On Thursday, February 23, 2006, Invader Lyn
(48) wrote:
Very nice. Lots of people aren't worth the pain of a breakup. You've captured that nicely.
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On Thursday, February 2, 2006, TropicalSnowstorm
(1703) wrote:
"if I had seen you enough to have something to miss" - great ending to this one. Ciao, T/S
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On Saturday, January 28, 2006, darkdesires
(139) wrote:
Its far too comon for someone to simply use something has a replacement. People using other people in such a manner is deplorable, but it makes me chuckle seeing has it doesn't even phase you.
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A former member wrote:
*frowns* yes...to be turned to in order to take away someone's pain of losing another...it's enough to make one realize what they do or don't want from love. *Evangel*
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On Saturday, January 28, 2006, LovelyAssassinx
(151) wrote:
I think this is probably the first poem on here that I've found...that I can 100% relate too. This is exactly how I feel about one of my ex's.
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On Saturday, January 28, 2006, elisa
(1616) wrote:
try as we will to disconnect.....there is something very personal about throwing ourselves on the alter of sacrifice.......if only our discarded carcass reaped the benefits of the spiritual blessing
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