bang [you're dead]
By Six-Out
dreamstocks and broken heartaches.
it makes us human.
is what she whispered- into my ear.
as I put the gun to her head.
bang.
we're a little shattered.
and a little mesmorized. her eyes.
good god. her eyes.
her tears.
and in the end, I'm good for nothing.
and words can be daggers
but they're throwing bullets- and we're left hiding.
under the sun starched skies.
left with starless goodbyes. goodnights.
goodlifes.
and fireflies.
is what they'd rip from this ignorance.
bliss is in the eye of the neglector.
tipsy and misguided. to sweet disdain
and this liquid harmony.
I'm metaphor. past.
now. kiss me.
in sweet spite.
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© 2005 Six-Out
Published on Monday, December 19, 2005.
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A former member wrote:
Another on I love. Words can be like daggers, get out of my head.
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On Monday, January 30, 2006, Alanarchy
(1200) wrote:
and words can be daggers *but they're throwing bullets- and we're left hiding. under the sun starched skies. left with starless goodbyes.* I wasn't prepared for this, man. words ride on your shoulder.
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On Thursday, December 22, 2005, Dei
(665) wrote:
ouch... this makes me sad
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On Tuesday, December 20, 2005, coly
(54) wrote:
i love it six your an aswome poet my fav part is the to paragraph
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On Tuesday, December 20, 2005, capt_funguy
(778) wrote:
hmmm .. and the past is all thats left with a whole lot of explaining to do ... the past will tell its truth whilst getting trampled .. the only thing clear in the end will be the echo --
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On Tuesday, December 20, 2005, capt_funguy
(778) wrote:
where i went with it anyway ... smooth write , slick ending .... funguy
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A former member wrote:
So visceral you are. I hardly comment, but I know now why so many others do. Bleh. Keep up the good writes.
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A former member wrote:
You nailed it man. I love the last two lines, perfect ending. "and words can be daggers
but they're throwing bullets- and we're left hiding." Perfect man. ~Ryan
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On Monday, December 19, 2005, sIo
(926) wrote:
no matter what i think some part of me will always love you. this was beautiful
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On Monday, December 19, 2005, Lotophagi
(333) wrote:
when I saw the title I thought this had to be you.... this is beautiful, liquid, full of desire and intense lyrical imagery. sublime write in the very essence of sublimity. Thank you.
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On Monday, December 19, 2005, BeautifulCalamity
(428) wrote:
i absolutely love you. this is beautiful six child, beautiful.