bang [you're dead]

By Six-Out

dreamstocks and broken heartaches.
it makes us human.
is what she whispered- into my ear.
as I put the gun to her head.

bang.

we're a little shattered.
and a little mesmorized. her eyes.
good god. her eyes.
her tears.
and in the end, I'm good for nothing.


and words can be daggers
but they're throwing bullets- and we're left hiding.
under the sun starched skies.
left with starless goodbyes. goodnights.
goodlifes.
and fireflies.
is what they'd rip from this ignorance.
bliss is in the eye of the neglector.

tipsy and misguided. to sweet disdain
and this liquid harmony.
I'm metaphor. past.



now. kiss me.
in sweet spite.

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© 2005 Six-Out
Published on Monday, December 19, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Another on I love. Words can be like daggers, get out of my head.

  • Alanarchy On Monday, January 30, 2006, Alanarchy (1200)By person wrote:

    and words can be daggers *but they're throwing bullets- and we're left hiding. under the sun starched skies. left with starless goodbyes.* I wasn't prepared for this, man. words ride on your shoulder.

  • Dei On Thursday, December 22, 2005, Dei (665)By person wrote:

    ouch... this makes me sad

  • coly On Tuesday, December 20, 2005, coly (54)By person wrote:

    i love it six your an aswome poet my fav part is the to paragraph

  • capt_funguy On Tuesday, December 20, 2005, capt_funguy (778)By person wrote:

    hmmm .. and the past is all thats left with a whole lot of explaining to do ... the past will tell its truth whilst getting trampled .. the only thing clear in the end will be the echo --

  • capt_funguy On Tuesday, December 20, 2005, capt_funguy (778)By person wrote:

    where i went with it anyway ... smooth write , slick ending .... funguy

  • A former member wrote: So visceral you are. I hardly comment, but I know now why so many others do. Bleh. Keep up the good writes.

  • A former member wrote: You nailed it man. I love the last two lines, perfect ending. "and words can be daggers but they're throwing bullets- and we're left hiding." Perfect man. ~Ryan

  • sIo On Monday, December 19, 2005, sIo (926)By person wrote:

    no matter what i think some part of me will always love you. this was beautiful

  • Lotophagi On Monday, December 19, 2005, Lotophagi (333)By person wrote:

    when I saw the title I thought this had to be you.... this is beautiful, liquid, full of desire and intense lyrical imagery. sublime write in the very essence of sublimity. Thank you.

  • BeautifulCalamity On Monday, December 19, 2005, BeautifulCalamity (428)By person wrote:

    i absolutely love you. this is beautiful six child, beautiful.


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