riverside reveries. -a lucid goodbye
By Six-Out
before tonight- I hadn't seen the stars in three months
and now. it's so amazingly beautiful.
peeling the label off of another generic beer. tasting midnight
and nearly grasping forever- but losing it in the smoke
watching the water rushing by. this is what life is
a mirage/ a river running dry. and not a worry in the world
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like those 3am memories. flashing by like an 80's film
view slightly distorted- but just enough color to matter
pick up lines and broken dreams. at the diner on highway 60
with a cheap motel and a half smoked cigarette
trying to find reality is impossible.
pixilated intentions. and goodbye's can shatter the silence
a broken dream is cliche- and a teardrop from the heavens is heartbreaking
sometimes. just sometimes/ it's all too much.
-standing at the edge. the water is frighteningly fast below
and it's go-time. now or never in the past tense. what should've been
isn't
take a step or live.
it's those pin.pricked dreams. laced in meloncholy denial
that makes goodbye so hard.
and I've never been one for a tear stained parting
with one foot on the crest of a tongue tied melodrama
and the other breaking the plane of what can be
I can see beauty- but I can't touch it
not yet
wash away the past.
and listen to the last words. crush the silence
from farewell to adieu.
this is nowhere near the end.
Awards
Comments on "riverside reveries. -a lucid goodbye"
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On Friday, August 25, 2017, Dreamscape
(22) wrote:
Nicely written poem. It’s almost as if it has its own heartbeat.
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On Tuesday, March 28, 2017, carlosjackal
(2788) wrote:
Even with that concluding couplet changed, a superb write.
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On Tuesday, March 28, 2017, Drea
(1388) wrote:
I miss reading your words.
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On Monday, May 12, 2008, insanemonroe
(15) wrote:
you're a truly beautiful writer-kat*
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A former member wrote:
Absolutely stunning...this poem is a masterpiece of writing...I love it
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On Wednesday, January 26, 2005, Ravenblade
(307) wrote:
Well Jon, I just couldn't keep myself from commenting on this too much longer, this is an amazing piece like many other you have written, I just wish that you would change your mind...>Raven
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On Wednesday, January 26, 2005, Dr Benway
(48) wrote:
WOW, If I could only explain things a pinch as well as you, I might be pretentious.
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A former member wrote:
dude the words you used are fucking great i just say the picture you were painting great shit bam
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On Monday, January 24, 2005, flying_fox
(571) wrote:
Sixy, this is just superb. Your words are beautifully melancholy yet oddly relaxing. I find this style of your works are like a meditation in sadness.
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On Monday, January 17, 2005, Dommi
(95) wrote:
"pixilated intentions. and goodbye's can shatter the silence.. a broken dream is cliche- and a teardrop from the heavens is heartbreaking.." this line nailed me to the wall and wouldn't let me down
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On Monday, January 17, 2005, Dommi
(95) wrote:
Well, it was the same type of feeling.. Spiffy work.. Yum.
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A former member wrote:
This work literally gave me goosebumps. Great words.
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On Monday, January 17, 2005, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
There's little else for me to say but to echo Jay Jii... this was a beautiful, impressive, and heart-rending write. You know I felt this.
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A former member wrote:
great write. it reminds me a little of a wonderful band called the weakerthans. this really was so eloquent and beautiful.................... -samone
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On Saturday, January 15, 2005, knightmirror
(426) wrote:
damnit man you are mustering up tears you've probably shed and germinated in your words then bloosomed in my eyes...*hugs*....thanks for sharing this -chris
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On Saturday, January 15, 2005, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
there's just something about 3am - disquieting moments... The concluding couplet is outstanding. "tasting midnight and nearly graspinig forever" - marvellous. Talent undeniable; awesome write.
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On Friday, January 14, 2005, K_Love
(525) wrote:
There were too many lines so beautiful I couldn't even begin to quote. Incredible write, every word left me breathless.
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On Friday, January 14, 2005, ardneK
(72) wrote:
You cant comment when a piece is just too good, I read this with awe and understanding, because it just speaks to me, I can feel your emotions wash over me in your words - >|
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On Friday, January 14, 2005, Whisper
(112) wrote:
Is it not beautiful how sad thoughts flourish into great poetry. ~Matt~
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A former member wrote:
Jesus man *bows* you know I can dig. ~Ryan