poetry.

By Six-Out

my eyes see your life.

my pen bleeds of your pain. as I dip it into your heart
your blood weaves my words- and your tears
/bring to life a picture

my fingers trace your spine- tapping your memories
as my hand creates a miracle.
life- in letters. spread upon a portrait of emotion
mountains of metaphors and [broken] hearts
and my lips can taste your soul

through my veins- pulse a gift [from -me-to- you]
as I trap time in my hands. and you can feel forever
in the beat of my heart, and in the stroke of my brush
upon a papered world- ink to my flesh
and you can watch the world create tomorrow
within the blink of an eye

you see my life through your eyes.

and you bleed of my pain. as I rip you to [shreds]
with an image of what.could've.been-
dreams laid to rest within the confines of a notebook
and my heart stains my sleeve

teardrops/ in harmonic precision- listen to my letters
a brink of delusion. just jump and we'll kiss the stars
maybe graze what is.

and in the end- if you can feel me in your blood
and taste what I've created.
burn with my pain


then my job is done

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Copyright 2004 Six-Out
Published on Tuesday, November 30, 2004.     Filed under: "Ironic" and "Poetry"
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  • Alchemist On Thursday, March 1, 2012, Alchemist (679)By person wrote:

    Well penned and it had me thinking of the despair of love.

  • Scarrzz On Monday, September 14, 2009, Scarrzz (235)By person wrote:

    As I read the lines, the feelings they conveyed kept pace inside me. My stomach knotted up. I can tell how deep this came from. Well said. Scholar

  • A former member wrote: this, Jon, is one of the best things I've ever read. seriously. full kudos man. what a warriah. Scholar

  • Delphoid-Q On Friday, December 3, 2004, Delphoid-Q (213)By person wrote:

    It is indeed... A wonderful contribution to its subject.

  • A former member wrote: this actually struck em as somethign i might write, but better. and its got a lot of weight on your style as opposed to mine, but it rocks. good job mexicant

  • K_Love On Tuesday, November 30, 2004, K_Love (525)By person wrote:

    Speechless work.. beautiful words. This was amazing. Lovely way of putting it. Well done

  • BeautifulCalamity On Tuesday, November 30, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (428)By person wrote:

    damn, I left a really good comment but the page decided not to respond :|, this is another awesome write six boy, I'll take fragments of this with me. . . your words, are drenched with beauty. wonderful :)

  • A former member wrote: The imagery is astounding. I wish I knew where your mind and heart were at the moment you wrote this.

  • MyBrokenMynd On Wednesday, December 1, 2004, MyBrokenMynd (167)By person wrote:

    stoned

  • Malice In Wonderland On Tuesday, November 30, 2004, Malice In Wonderland (976)By person wrote:

    Thought-provoking...The peculiar feeling I get when I read this means I'll most definatly revisit it...Haunting... Scholar

  • stormtalk On Tuesday, November 30, 2004, stormtalk (727)By person wrote:

    Manual spinal taps and soul coolatas... this is like a party in my nightmares.

  • elisa On Tuesday, November 30, 2004, elisa (1595)By person wrote:

    writing poetry is similar to slowly bleeding to death....be it dripped in ink or stacked in bits this is beautifully written:) elisa

  • flying_fox On Tuesday, November 30, 2004, flying_fox (571)By person wrote:

    Great work Sixy... you have a talent for taking words which could potentially sound glib or cliched as absolutely meaningful and new. ANd that is very clever indeed. *applauds*


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