dreamscaped -sighs [whisper me away]

By Six-Out

words are just words until they tear your soul apart
-then they become bullets, from your revolver
kiss the smoke filled air
and watch the hole in my heart- fall to the floor

::touch me- with your outdated intricacies
and leave me to sift through the broken eggshells
that I tried to walk on/ when I was around you

such a pretentious little mind- you try to hold your head high
such grace, that can never be attained
when your tounge is the barrel that I'm looking down
and begging for your kiss/ whisper in my ear
and take away my pain, sweet one

meander through disillusioned promises
and count the stars in the sky- or wave goodbye to the moon
because when your eyes pierce like diamonds
a simple soul can be lost

insipid insights- your lips no longer enchant me
as I beg of you...
kiss.me.again

-and take away my pain

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Published on Tuesday, October 26, 2004. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "dreamscaped -sighs [whisper me away]"

A former member wrote: This write is AMAZING for lack of a better word... I'm speechless on this really nothing I could say would ever be good enough to describe something so amazing... thanks for sharing!
On Wednesday, October 27, 2004, DarkDruidess (313) wrote:

I liked the tense pressure that built up...I like...
On Wednesday, October 27, 2004, NikesRain (1240) wrote:

beautiful and painful, brings up/out so much, well done. Great write hun.
On Wednesday, October 27, 2004, Derelict Dream (38) wrote:

Enchanting, provocative.......Extremely Awesome....Six, you da MAN!!!
On Wednesday, October 27, 2004, Lotophagi (333) wrote:

not bad.... not bad at all..... that rocked my world. each line has a meaning to be weighed before the next emerges..... damn good write.
A former member wrote: - until I am almost senseless. ~ Rose.
A former member wrote: "meander through disillusioned promises and count the stars in the sky- or wave goodbye to the moon because when your eyes pierce like diamonds a simple soul can be lost"; This is miraculous. You are a thief of breaths . . your verse holds me still unti
On Tuesday, October 26, 2004, BleedSilver (298) wrote:

I love how you began this piece...' words are just words until they tear your soul apart' This is just wonderful...It is amazing to me, a novice writer at best
On Tuesday, October 26, 2004, BleedSilver (298) wrote:

That you can write like this. So very descriptive and emotionally full with so few words. Great work.
On Tuesday, October 26, 2004, sIo (898) wrote:

i agree with serpentine. no words are gracious enough to bestow upon your writing.
A former member wrote: I almost had to stop reading at the very first line. you are a wonder with words. I have nothing to say that would justify the emotions I felt from this. ~serpentine~