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dreamscaped -sighs [whisper me away]
By Six-Out
words are just words until they tear your soul apart
-then they become bullets, from your revolver
kiss the smoke filled air
and watch the hole in my heart- fall to the floor
::touch me- with your outdated intricacies
and leave me to sift through the broken eggshells
that I tried to walk on/ when I was around you
such a pretentious little mind- you try to hold your head high
such grace, that can never be attained
when your tounge is the barrel that I'm looking down
and begging for your kiss/ whisper in my ear
and take away my pain, sweet one
meander through disillusioned promises
and count the stars in the sky- or wave goodbye to the moon
because when your eyes pierce like diamonds
a simple soul can be lost
insipid insights- your lips no longer enchant me
as I beg of you...
kiss.me.again
-and take away my pain
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Copyright 2004 Six-Out
Published on Tuesday, October 26, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "dreamscaped -sighs [whisper me away]"
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A former member wrote:
This write is AMAZING for lack of a better word... I'm speechless on this really nothing I could say would ever be good enough to describe something so amazing... thanks for sharing!
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On Wednesday, October 27, 2004, DarkDruidess
(326)
wrote:
I liked the tense pressure that built up...I like...
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On Wednesday, October 27, 2004, NikesRain
(1298) wrote:
beautiful and painful, brings up/out so much, well done. Great write hun.
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On Wednesday, October 27, 2004, Derelict Dream
(38) wrote:
Enchanting, provocative.......Extremely Awesome....Six, you da MAN!!!
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On Wednesday, October 27, 2004, Lotophagi
(333) wrote:
not bad.... not bad at all..... that rocked my world. each line has a meaning to be weighed before the next emerges..... damn good write.
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A former member wrote:
- until I am almost senseless. ~ Rose.
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A former member wrote:
"meander through disillusioned promises
and count the stars in the sky- or wave goodbye to the moon because when your eyes pierce like diamonds a simple soul can be lost"; This is miraculous. You are a thief of breaths . . your verse holds me still unti
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On Tuesday, October 26, 2004, BleedSilver
(298) wrote:
I love how you began this piece...' words are just words until they tear your soul apart' This is just wonderful...It is amazing to me, a novice writer at best
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On Tuesday, October 26, 2004, BleedSilver
(298) wrote:
That you can write like this. So very descriptive and emotionally full with so few words. Great work.
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On Tuesday, October 26, 2004, sIo
(926) wrote:
i agree with serpentine. no words are gracious enough to bestow upon your writing.
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A former member wrote:
I almost had to stop reading at the very first line. you are a wonder with words. I have nothing to say that would justify the emotions I felt from this. ~serpentine~
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