The Little Girl

By Crystal Passion

Quiet home
she's alone

Little girl
painful world

Broke a plate
dad's home late

Mom smokes dope
cannot cope

Little girl
painful world

Something crashes
thirty lashes

Body numb
suck on thumb


Little girl
painful world


punished often
three foot coffin

No more girl
in this world

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Copyright 2003 Crystal Passion
Published on Friday, October 10, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: So sad, but yet, so true. There is such evil in this world.

  • Ribcage On Sunday, December 16, 2012, Ribcage (82)By person wrote:

    When things like this happen it makes me feel sick. I have no qualms about adults, but kids? Never kids...

  • Void Vortex On Thursday, June 29, 2017, Void Vortex (309)By person wrote:

    ...yeah. Thanx for sharing this touching piece. :)

  • bpathos On Friday, May 27, 2011, bpathos (84)By person wrote:

    I like this.

  • purr_verse On Sunday, November 14, 2004, purr_verse (1051)By person wrote:

    very powerfully effective piece! i agree with the myriad of comments before me. :)

  • Ideas On Friday, October 22, 2004, Ideas (50)By person wrote:

    No matter how sad, her death seems merciful. I loved the way this was written.

  • Whisper On Sunday, July 25, 2004, Whisper (116)By person wrote:

    I was ensnared and captivated by the emotion caught in this write. -Matt-

  • A former member wrote: Absolutley breathtaking...there is so much sadness and yet its still beautiful on a painful level...excellent write.*DDP

  • A former member wrote: i was there before and what's sad is that i'm stil there; i feel your pain

  • aXe FactoR On Monday, May 24, 2004, aXe FactoR (342)By person wrote:

    grippingly sad.

  • DarkNTormented On Thursday, April 1, 2004, DarkNTormented (13)By person wrote:

    that is really sad but i too think its a very good peice

  • A former member wrote: sad, but really good...

  • A former member wrote: wow...i know how that is all to well... ~LEAH

  • flying_fox On Tuesday, January 27, 2004, flying_fox (596)By person wrote:

    oh wow... this is very good. So very sad and I can only hope this is fiction not truth. FF

  • Rebel_Angel On Monday, January 26, 2004, Rebel_Angel (328)By person wrote:

    this is a very sad story!...

  • Dancing_Monkey On Thursday, January 15, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1288)By person wrote:

    nicely put together. the story was quite sad. :o( M.

  • CharlottesWeb On Monday, December 15, 2003, CharlottesWeb (521)By person wrote:

    Quick paced, dreadfully sprinting through every word and not wanting to reach the last. Yeah, thats it. I knew what was coming but you forced such a fast pace. ~JMDW~

  • A former member wrote: "Something crashes thirty lashes" I pray not that in saying this reminds me of Edward Gorey poisons you: C is for Crystal who faded w/ paints P for Passion who gave us pleasure w/ words

  • Crystal Passion On Tuesday, October 28, 2003, Crystal Passion (222)By person wrote:

    *melts*

  • Rebel_Angel On Saturday, October 25, 2003, Rebel_Angel (328)By person wrote:

    very nice write but also very very sad...Why do adults take their anger out on helpless children?

  • Drea On Tuesday, October 14, 2003, Drea (1505)By person wrote:

    agrees with six. so sad. i just saw on tv something like this happening to a lil boy. ~Drea~

  • GreekPhilosopher On Sunday, October 12, 2003, GreekPhilosopher (156)By person wrote:

    A Morbid Tale To Say The Least... Too Surreal! GPhD.

  • A former member wrote: A sad picture of many young ladies lives at home. Dysfunctional homes!

  • A former member wrote: god,this is so sad...i really like the simplicity in the structure of this poem,It almost makes it seem more chidish itself,as though written by the girl,if that makes n e sense.Wonderful erite,Dusky..xxx...

  • A former member wrote: The repetition of "Little girl / painful world" was very effective. A beautiful and powerful work.

  • SilentStalker On Saturday, October 11, 2003, SilentStalker (1091)By person wrote:

    ...yeah, that's sad...you've said more than enough in such a short poem...well done.. -Darun Scholar

  • A former member wrote: It's really sad... but I like it... Scholar

  • yslehc On Friday, October 10, 2003, yslehc (340)By person wrote:

    aww thats sad

  • _Andrew_ On Friday, October 10, 2003, _Andrew_ (251)By person wrote:

    wonderful write kryz

  • Trichotillomaniac On Friday, October 10, 2003, Trichotillomaniac (42)By person wrote:

    tragic..=(

  • Six-Out On Friday, October 10, 2003, Six-Out (1481)By person wrote:

    The everyday tragedies that accomidate this world...so sad.

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