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The Little Girl
By Crystal Passion
Quiet home
she's alone
Little girl
painful world
Broke a plate
dad's home late
Mom smokes dope
cannot cope
Little girl
painful world
Something crashes
thirty lashes
Body numb
suck on thumb
Little girl
painful world
punished often
three foot coffin
No more girl
in this world
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Copyright 2003 Crystal Passion
Published on Friday, October 10, 2003.
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A former member wrote:
So sad, but yet, so true. There is such evil in this world.
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A former member wrote:
When things like this happen it makes me feel sick. I have no qualms about adults, but kids? Never kids...
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On Thursday, June 29, 2017, Void Vortex
(303)
wrote:
...yeah. Thanx for sharing this touching piece. :)
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On Friday, May 27, 2011, bpathos
(78) wrote:
I like this.
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On Sunday, November 14, 2004, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
very powerfully effective piece! i agree with the myriad of comments before me. :)
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On Friday, October 22, 2004, Ideas
(50) wrote:
No matter how sad, her death seems merciful. I loved the way this was written.
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On Sunday, July 25, 2004, Whisper
(112) wrote:
I was ensnared and captivated by the emotion caught in this write. -Matt-
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A former member wrote:
Absolutley breathtaking...there is so much sadness and yet its still beautiful on a painful level...excellent write.*DDP
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A former member wrote:
i was there before and what's sad is that i'm stil there; i feel your pain
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On Monday, May 24, 2004, aXe FactoR
(335) wrote:
grippingly sad.
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On Thursday, April 1, 2004, DarkNTormented
(12) wrote:
that is really sad but i too think its a very good peice
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A former member wrote:
sad, but really good...
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A former member wrote:
wow...i know how that is all to well...
~LEAH
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On Tuesday, January 27, 2004, flying_fox
(573) wrote:
oh wow... this is very good. So very sad and I can only hope this is fiction not truth. FF
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On Monday, January 26, 2004, Rebel_Angel
(321) wrote:
this is a very sad story!...
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On Thursday, January 15, 2004, Dancing_Monkey
(1246) wrote:
nicely put together. the story was quite sad. :o( M.
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On Monday, December 15, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(511) wrote:
Quick paced, dreadfully sprinting through every word and not wanting to reach the last. Yeah, thats it. I knew what was coming but you forced such a fast pace. ~JMDW~
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A former member wrote:
"Something crashes thirty lashes" I pray not that in saying this reminds me of Edward Gorey poisons you: C is for Crystal who faded w/ paints P for Passion who gave us pleasure w/ words
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On Tuesday, October 28, 2003, Crystal Passion
(221) wrote:
*melts*
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On Saturday, October 25, 2003, Rebel_Angel
(321) wrote:
very nice write but also very very sad...Why do adults take their anger out on helpless children?
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On Tuesday, October 14, 2003, Drea
(1443) wrote:
agrees with six. so sad. i just saw on tv something like this happening to a lil boy. ~Drea~
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On Sunday, October 12, 2003, GreekPhilosopher
(156) wrote:
A Morbid Tale To Say The Least... Too Surreal! GPhD.
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A former member wrote:
A sad picture of many young ladies lives at home. Dysfunctional homes!
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A former member wrote:
god,this is so sad...i really like the simplicity in the structure of this poem,It almost makes it seem more chidish itself,as though written by the girl,if that makes n e sense.Wonderful erite,Dusky..xxx...
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A former member wrote:
The repetition of "Little girl / painful world" was very effective. A beautiful and powerful work.
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On Saturday, October 11, 2003, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...yeah, that's sad...you've said more than enough in such a short poem...well done.. -Darun
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A former member wrote:
It's really sad... but I like it...
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On Friday, October 10, 2003, yslehc
(334) wrote:
aww thats sad
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On Friday, October 10, 2003, _Andrew_
(245) wrote:
wonderful write kryz
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On Friday, October 10, 2003, Trichotillomaniac
(42) wrote:
tragic..=(
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On Friday, October 10, 2003, Six-Out
(1435) wrote:
The everyday tragedies that accomidate this world...so sad.
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