tonight I finish Hate
By cre
to complete hate
an ending based
on a whirlwind's true fruition
not to quit
but to pass the finish line
and now these words lie
in a bed of blood and greed
and now you've been given
a golden gift
a chance to see
that words may never dissipate
deeds and broken dreams
compound and multiply
you may wonder why
as you stare into this face of pain
you may beat your chest
while never laying eyes upon the stains
that drip like evil
from fingers that dared to ever trace
the contours of my face
and now you call to your god
on your knees in plastic humility
a dawning crashes your expression
and finally you know
the handle you thought you had
the appearance of control
was false
and all you pulled so close to you
bleeds now
into this inky broken pit
a wading pool of lies
a mirror of hatred
falling from the eyes
of a once more dying child
we see this now
etched in final breath
released from living death
so falls the ribbon of pain undue
for it lies still and slashed in two
this line of finish -
let go, falls away
so now, bid farewell
so now, say
we shall complete
we shall finish
hate.
Comments on "tonight I finish Hate"
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On Saturday, September 18, 2004, Delphoid-Q
(213) wrote:
This is an amazingly dynamic piece... Let us be done, I say!
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On Friday, September 5, 2003, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
Remarkable...your words eat through me, and each write touches my heart. This is no different.
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On Thursday, September 4, 2003, worm
(1149) wrote:
the willingness to accept the fate of ourselves, created by another, is far too much to ask... a beautifully written piece... "bravo!"
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On Tuesday, September 2, 2003, A Velvet Tongue
(434) wrote:
hate has eaten away many a heart...but oddly enough, it can salvage one too...powerful and seemingly healing..great piece, Cre
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On Tuesday, September 2, 2003, anathema
(50) wrote:
there's fury and pain in this... and then... almost triumph. well written emotion.
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On Tuesday, September 2, 2003, Ophelia
(221) wrote:
beautiful, the way you it evolve, and I like the new picture too.........O.
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On Tuesday, September 2, 2003, manywalks
(747) wrote:
Mmmmm, liked the transition in this, made it all the stronger. ~ mw
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A former member wrote:
Really liked the second to last stanza and the feel of this write in general. Great work. ~Urban Shipwreck~
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On Tuesday, September 2, 2003, darkvamptress
(16) wrote:
wow. i like i dont htink i have read a poem here that well thought out and writen but i like it a lot. it is creative~mistress~
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On Tuesday, September 2, 2003, Blinded_Tiger
(518) wrote:
I enjoyed it alot. And it is well said. What I enjoyed mostly was that after I got tired of all the you-you-you it shifted to we-we .. That is a strong statement to make. Tiger