On the Tips Of a Driven Wind
By cre
I write this
fingertips to the falling wind
with an utter lack of rhyme
I cannot draw this word to word
because that beauty
belies
the pain resting
like pricking bits of flame
on every single
cellular indentation
of supple skin
This pierces me more
purposefully
Than brazen swords
Dripping from the press
Molten Metal
For when I feel the fear
and halt from running
away
I know the heart
of the place
I need to be
to exist
is a Porcelain square
or Two
A slick, smoothed with the tips
of fingers that knew
This would be
A space
In which
Hope and the death of such
Would meet a moment
More eternally binding
And the red, red dream
Would obscure the Waking World.
And we would all drip
drip
drip
Down the drain.
Because there is
No
More
Beautiful
on the tips of a driven wind.
Comments on "On the Tips Of a Driven Wind"
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On Wednesday, May 9, 2012, cre
(410) wrote:
This is one of my favorites, too.
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A former member wrote:
you really have a way with words.
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A former member wrote:
this is too good for words. you truly write your heart into every piece and i will never stop loving it. :)
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On Wednesday, July 30, 2003, Godot
(22) wrote:
masterful, Cre. i absolutely loved this one. this is how free verse should be. well done.
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On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
I am beginning to see a change in your work. Metamorphisis is Grand isn't it? So freeing, enriching and just plain fun. I agree with SP... this really snuck up on me. I was just skipping along the words unsuspecting like...then Bam!!! +JM+
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A former member wrote:
Mmmmph, when you really read this one it sneaks up with you and hits you below the belt. The critic in me says sharpen it, but the purist in me says well done.
-SP
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A former member wrote:
what a clever way to describe a bathroom and sliced wrists..you make an ugly thing beautiful..it almost saddens me, that ability you have
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On Saturday, July 26, 2003, KittyStryker
(710) wrote:
very well written... you've branched out to new orchards in your poetry, and i like that a lot. forlorn like Ophelia's forgotten flowers on the riverbank... and meaningful.
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A former member wrote:
you use such powerful words. wow
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On Friday, July 25, 2003, Stranger
(263) wrote:
Beautiful words that left me despondent but peaceful and in awe of your grace.
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On Friday, July 25, 2003, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
I....I um.....oh wow. I'm not going to bring this piece down by commenting.
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On Friday, July 25, 2003, Jonas
(715) wrote:
so sad, always so sad. ...hope is like nostalgia, nostalgia while bitter-sweet beautiful; useless... windswept and cold you left me
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A former member wrote:
jane....damn.
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A former member wrote:
Speechless. #flower#
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On Friday, July 25, 2003, Clementine
(121) wrote:
I'm bleeding oxygen