Lust
By A Velvet Tongue
I detest you..
I want you
Like a breath that is haggard ...hushed.
I'll Make you
...And break you..
A malignant, stagnant rush..
I taste you
...and spit you
poison is this crush
I watch you
...and stalk you
Lust fuels a virgin's blush
What lies behind those liquid pools
Hued of the finest brandy...
Creamed decadence flows past my lips
your taste...bittersweet candy..
Come coil your darkness ,around my thighs
Unfurl wicked delights upon me..
Beckon the nectar from my wounds..
A Tourniquet....cut free...
I crave you
I torture you
With velvet words and lies
I'll tempt you
I'll Keep you
Mock your pitious cries..
I tease you
and slice you
to a shredded pile
I'll damn you
and free you
my beauty ,dark and vile
I hide you
and force you
fully in the light
I'll wake you
and ride you
a dozen darkened nights
I love you
I taunt you
Keeping you at bay..
I rule you
Mold you...
You'd have it no other way...
Comments on "Lust"
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A former member wrote:
simply wonderful
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On Thursday, September 1, 2005, abattoir
(115) wrote:
what a spitfire vixen. you come across the face with a back-hand. and you were right I loved it.
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On Tuesday, June 14, 2005, etarnally damnd
(61) wrote:
great write.-michael
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On Friday, January 7, 2005, The Crimson Queen
(917) wrote:
amazing
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On Thursday, January 6, 2005, blue
(1409) wrote:
*smiles* ...that was really great!! *more smiles* ~b
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A former member wrote:
You are without a doubt one of the most talented poets on this site. Your work is like a drink of the devils blood, so sinful yet you want more.
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On Wednesday, May 5, 2004, Mischevious Princess
(28) wrote:
very very very nice write hon....I like it.....
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On Thursday, April 8, 2004, Neith
(21) wrote:
Beautiful poem, extremely well written...it leave's me wanting more :) ~shy vampire
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On Thursday, April 8, 2004, murder_in_clubland
(384) wrote:
o.0 i love it ~slave
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On Thursday, April 1, 2004, DarkNTormented
(11) wrote:
i love it very very well put
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A former member wrote:
I hate this poem for what it symbolizes to me. I love this poem for the work of art that it is. You have great talent.
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A former member wrote:
All my feelings I can sum up in one word, BEAUTIFUL!
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A former member wrote:
i like this piece very much, you seem to have influence over people when you write...myself included
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On Friday, January 23, 2004, flying_fox
(571) wrote:
wow wow wow wow. Pure erotica, empowering...no doubt you've had many at your mercy. I say again...wow. FF
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On Wednesday, December 3, 2003, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
good gods, what is there left to say?! i'm a latecomer to this little beauty, and i'll just say that i agree with everyone who thought this dripped passion infernal, divine... purr
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A former member wrote:
"With velvet words and lies " this poem not only brings outh the lust in me, it hungers me... my legs shiver & shake, my hand finds a place to imagine...
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A former member wrote:
i feel the music of Enigma/Manson in this poem; dirrty, eroctic, haunting, trance, soulful, hard, gothic, sexual... pure unadulterated lust!
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A former member wrote:
"Quit staring at my tits!!" I can't! Their gorgeous; velvet red, with that whip, making me wish it were something else... damn! Pure lust...
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A former member wrote:
I love this.. not much more to say, except it's great, love the flow..
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On Saturday, November 8, 2003, SGT Bloth
(162) wrote:
WoW!! Darling.... Not only do you have a velvet tongue, but also a velvet mind.....Good Write i loved it....Bloth AnDii :*
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A former member wrote:
Whoa. I need to find a woman like this. Nice one.
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On Monday, October 13, 2003, Silver Spectre
(95) wrote:
I really liked this one. Lustful and still seems like just a toy you play with
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On Monday, October 13, 2003, Silver Spectre
(95) wrote:
and yet there seems to be more than just flesh....nah...I am probably all wrong
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On Saturday, September 27, 2003, Johny_D_Lewis
(467) wrote:
i like it...reminds me of an exgirlfriend
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A former member wrote:
very cool, man. paints a pretty picture of gettin funky. well worded and very intelligent.
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A former member wrote:
Very well written! You definately express the mad power of Lust!~Ded
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A former member wrote:
I'd add it to my favorites list if I knew how, this is fucking mind boggling. You make me sad because i know I will never ooze genius the way this poem does.
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On Sunday, September 14, 2003, TheMistressBucket
(18) wrote:
This is fantastic! Soooo SEXY! Nice work. :)
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On Monday, August 18, 2003, Chameleon
(111) wrote:
I am going to just jump into this crown of lust fanatics and say...that was beautiful...here, have a rose---(>
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On Sunday, August 17, 2003, OLd SouL
(717) wrote:
I have to go change my panties now.
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On Sunday, August 17, 2003, Drea
(1388) wrote:
i loved it. i love all your work. very good read.. nice use of words. ~Drea~
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On Sunday, August 10, 2003, eternal despair
(66) wrote:
hhhhmmmmmm well written. i really like this,...*leaves to read more* .::ChéRie::.
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On Sunday, August 10, 2003, The Fallen Angel
(234) wrote:
Wooh! This is one of your best pieces...a ride i'll never forget
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On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, Jonas
(715) wrote:
eloquent... the rhythm, the rhyme, they fit the piece perfectly... lust... the words put visions in my head and heat in my heart... well written.
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On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, GreekPhilosopher
(156) wrote:
Reading This Reminds Me Of A Tug-Of-War Scenario... But Oozes Sexuality And Dominance. Me Like. GPhD.
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On Thursday, July 31, 2003, A Velvet Tongue
(434) wrote:
mmmm who ended up in the mud after that game? heh
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On Thursday, July 31, 2003, GreekPhilosopher
(156) wrote:
It Was Me... With My White Underwear... THRILLING!
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On Friday, July 25, 2003, Liz
(265) wrote:
makes me feel dirty, sexy, and strong. a very solid, confident piece.
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A former member wrote:
Can't say anything they havent already said really. But I loved it. It felt like... cream. It felt like cream. Soft, flowing, but it had substance. I like. #flower#
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On Friday, July 18, 2003, A Velvet Tongue
(434) wrote:
Thank you very much, for your comments..
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A former member wrote:
This flows beautifully. Me like
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On Saturday, July 12, 2003, hate_doll
(263) wrote:
LOOK! it's letting me comment!! and I LOVE this piece...so dark, sadistic, loverly. Just like yourself ;) keep writing, darling, you truly have talent...
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On Thursday, July 10, 2003, Blood of Winter
(296) wrote:
Thank you, the piece reminds me of times past. It truly inspires the word.
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A former member wrote:
good, no great, fluent, variant...hmmm don't know what to say, tempting, sounds true... I just like it, it fits. keep it going!!
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A former member wrote:
NOOOO I am in control! Sexy poem!
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On Saturday, July 5, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
I have a bit of a hard time commenting on your work. So I'm just going to say I like this one. ~DW~
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A former member wrote:
great write...it does seem instinctive in a way, but very smooth and satisfying...wonderful ~saint~