A Crying Rain

By cre

The water called to the liquid in her eyes
And the tears did then begin to rise
Within this space of hollow sound
And unmistakable call of moisture seeking ground
a drip
a drip
Echoing within the walls of all they sought to quell
As he said "why" and cried to break this spell
She drew within herself and trembling paled
And surely eons came and went before her breath exhaled
"I cannot"
A droop of head and she said "You know that it will rain"
For the world itself grew cold and wept at her enduring pain
And all that fell beneath their aching hearts
Twas love for her he dared to then impart
With a gentle touch he peered into her soul
"I know."
"My dear, I know."

And then the receding water slowly swirled away
As she sighed and let a final tear sweep softly down her face.

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Copyright 2003 cre
Published on Saturday, June 7, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • rosemaiden On Friday, February 3, 2012, rosemaiden (185)By person wrote:

    oh wow...........this was amazing!

  • BoldSolitude On Tuesday, April 6, 2004, BoldSolitude (214)By person wrote:

    Breathtaking. Oh, to find that someone that really understands without words being said. A like minded soul.

  • The Fallen Angel On Sunday, September 7, 2003, The Fallen Angel (235)By person wrote:

    heh...breathtaking Cre!+Fallen One+

  • A former member wrote: This stirs up the emotions something fierce. I do miss having a gentle voice to sooth my pain, in the way only a girlfriend can... :)

  • Six-Out On Thursday, June 12, 2003, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    What can I say that hasn't been said. Wow...

  • Stranger On Monday, June 9, 2003, Stranger (264)By person wrote:

    This defines innovative. I thought that it was impossible, at this point, to write anything relating to the age old tears/rain metaphor and not have be completely cliché. I stand corrected, very corrected. Amazing.

  • DoctorAsh On Monday, June 9, 2003, DoctorAsh (373)By person wrote:

    how the hell did i miss this piece .. i love this, amazing write.[D&A]

  • diavolessa On Sunday, June 8, 2003, diavolessa (208)By person wrote:

    only a beautiful soul can write such a beautiful poem... You stole my hear with this poem! :)

  • A former member wrote: i love it jane, extremely powerful. , undeniably wonderful

  • manywalks On Saturday, June 7, 2003, manywalks (750)By person wrote:

    Cre!!!!! This was simply an amazing piece of work. Raw, powerful, overwhelming. ~ mw

  • GothicBlack On Saturday, June 7, 2003, GothicBlack (186)By person wrote:

    wow cre, I’m left breathless.. speechless... what can be said to such a beautiful, powerful write. how sad... its overpowering... its despair in its pure form, and sadness in its rawest. wow... ~gothic~


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