A Crying Rain
By cre
The water called to the liquid in her eyes
And the tears did then begin to rise
Within this space of hollow sound
And unmistakable call of moisture seeking ground
a drip
a drip
Echoing within the walls of all they sought to quell
As he said "why" and cried to break this spell
She drew within herself and trembling paled
And surely eons came and went before her breath exhaled
"I cannot"
A droop of head and she said "You know that it will rain"
For the world itself grew cold and wept at her enduring pain
And all that fell beneath their aching hearts
Twas love for her he dared to then impart
With a gentle touch he peered into her soul
"I know."
"My dear, I know."
And then the receding water slowly swirled away
As she sighed and let a final tear sweep softly down her face.
Comments on "A Crying Rain"
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On Friday, February 3, 2012, rosemaiden
(180) wrote:
oh wow...........this was amazing!
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On Tuesday, April 6, 2004, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
Breathtaking. Oh, to find that someone that really understands without words being said. A like minded soul.
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On Sunday, September 7, 2003, The Fallen Angel
(234) wrote:
heh...breathtaking Cre!+Fallen One+
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A former member wrote:
This stirs up the emotions something fierce. I do miss having a gentle voice to sooth my pain, in the way only a girlfriend can... :)
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On Thursday, June 12, 2003, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
What can I say that hasn't been said. Wow...
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On Monday, June 9, 2003, Stranger
(263) wrote:
This defines innovative. I thought that it was impossible, at this point, to write anything relating to the age old tears/rain metaphor and not have be completely cliché. I stand corrected, very corrected. Amazing.
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On Monday, June 9, 2003, DoctorAsh
(371) wrote:
how the hell did i miss this piece .. i love this, amazing write.[D&A]
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On Sunday, June 8, 2003, diavolessa
(207) wrote:
only a beautiful soul can write such a beautiful poem... You stole my hear with this poem! :)
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A former member wrote:
i love it jane, extremely powerful. , undeniably wonderful
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On Saturday, June 7, 2003, manywalks
(747) wrote:
Cre!!!!! This was simply an amazing piece of work. Raw, powerful, overwhelming. ~ mw
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On Saturday, June 7, 2003, GothicBlack
(186) wrote:
wow cre, I’m left breathless.. speechless... what can be said to such a beautiful, powerful write. how sad... its overpowering... its despair in its pure form, and sadness in its rawest. wow... ~gothic~