Waiting
By Narcissa
I tried to tell you something today
But it sounded like a spider sighing
against the sky
And if you stand any closer to heaven
You might
not hear me at all...
I stood outside for hours
With
my palms up
Hoping to catch something....
But heaven doesn't
drop trinkets, just rain
And it stuttered in my hands like a hard
apology
It wasn't enough
Maybe it should have been
And maybe,
I shouldn't attend funerals
Or cry for strangers
Or cry...at all
I pick flowers from fresh bouquets
And place them on neglected graves
Have their spirits abandoned
them too?
And if I knew you wanted a cream colored coffin
I would have given you my skin
Then I wouldn't be here
With
a handful of stolen lilies
Talking to ghosts who have nothing to
say
Waiting...
Waiting...
Waiting...
And for what?
...You.
Comments on "Waiting"
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On Tuesday, December 12, 2017, Cassette
(1087) wrote:
you have a way of hammering in the nail so that we can never get it back out.
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A former member wrote:
I came back to read a few of my favorite poets in an effort to inspire myself to write again. This reminds me I obviously have a long road back.... I love how your words surprise me yet fit together beautifully. Love it
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On Sunday, April 4, 2010, blue
(1409) wrote:
right. i am not reading anymore tonite. crush you? crush me. you've no idea. ~b
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On Sunday, April 4, 2010, Narcissa
(391) wrote:
then we are even...for now...
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On Saturday, April 3, 2010, ubiquitoussoul
(343) wrote:
Beautifully told..the imagery sewed together by stirring words that touched a hanging emotion..Glad to take the frame down to have a second look..Thanks for this amazing write.
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On Saturday, April 3, 2010, A Life Without You
(146) wrote:
It definitely pierced the heart, imagery in every word, emotions of sadness, yet confusion... as if your there in every line, bravo my friend.
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A former member wrote:
'a cream coloured coffin'....holy---**tears up** ---so holy. .. i dun know whether to pray or scream my cries; this affects me in such a terrible raw vicious way; your words ahve been clouded as of late. blessings. and keep your words and heart open. beauty.
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On Sunday, April 4, 2010, Narcissa
(391) wrote:
yes...I do hope they change soon...thank you.
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On Saturday, April 3, 2010, Musik2MyEyes
(192) wrote:
Okay every so often there is one that stirs things that you thought you had under control. This made me cry. It was beautiful.
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On Saturday, April 3, 2010, Malcholm Dark
(806) wrote:
Fantastic! I love the fact you are there saying the things you need to, although you remain conflicted about it... a brilliant piece of writing.... "with a handful of stolen lines, talking to ghosts who have nothing to say"... thanks, this line will stay with me for a long while...
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A former member wrote:
palms up....in admiration. I loved the development, It reminded me of "a noiseless patient spider" I think it's called by Whitman, which enlivened and enriched the read. Funny, we posted such similar writes so closely. Very artful, patiently developed with care, precision and craft. *bows before enchanting craftswoman*
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A former member wrote:
I like the stuttering (heaven?) early on... and, yes, the stolen lilies.... the easter flower... and the abandoned spirit... mmmm your skin... must be like your thoughts..... a grave worth dying for, doubtless..... such a powerful metaphor there.
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On Sunday, April 4, 2010, Narcissa
(391) wrote:
however my words flow they can never compare to yours...thank you...thank all of you.