Waiting

By Narcissa

I tried to tell you something today
But it sounded like a spider sighing against the sky
And if you stand any closer to heaven
You might not hear me at all...


I stood outside for hours
With my palms up
Hoping to catch something....
But heaven doesn't drop trinkets, just rain
And it stuttered in my hands like a hard apology


It wasn't enough
Maybe it should have been
And maybe,
I shouldn't attend funerals
Or cry for strangers
Or cry...at all



I pick flowers from fresh bouquets
And place them on neglected graves
Have their spirits abandoned them too?


And if I knew you wanted a cream colored coffin
I would have given you my skin
Then I wouldn't be here
With a handful of stolen lilies
Talking to ghosts who have nothing to say



Waiting...
Waiting...
Waiting...



And for what?



...You.

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Copyright 2010 Narcissa
Published on Saturday, April 3, 2010.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Cassette On Tuesday, December 12, 2017, Cassette (1087)By person wrote:

    you have a way of hammering in the nail so that we can never get it back out.

  • A former member wrote: I came back to read a few of my favorite poets in an effort to inspire myself to write again. This reminds me I obviously have a long road back.... I love how your words surprise me yet fit together beautifully. Love it

  • blue On Sunday, April 4, 2010, blue (1409)By person wrote:

    right. i am not reading anymore tonite. crush you? crush me. you've no idea. ~b

  • Narcissa On Sunday, April 4, 2010, Narcissa (391)By person wrote:

    then we are even...for now...

  • ubiquitoussoul On Saturday, April 3, 2010, ubiquitoussoul (343)By person wrote:

    Beautifully told..the imagery sewed together by stirring words that touched a hanging emotion..Glad to take the frame down to have a second look..Thanks for this amazing write.

  • A Life Without You On Saturday, April 3, 2010, A Life Without You (146)By person wrote:

    It definitely pierced the heart, imagery in every word, emotions of sadness, yet confusion... as if your there in every line, bravo my friend.

  • A former member wrote: 'a cream coloured coffin'....holy---**tears up** ---so holy. .. i dun know whether to pray or scream my cries; this affects me in such a terrible raw vicious way; your words ahve been clouded as of late. blessings. and keep your words and heart open. beauty.

  • Narcissa On Sunday, April 4, 2010, Narcissa (391)By person wrote:

    yes...I do hope they change soon...thank you.

  • Musik2MyEyes On Saturday, April 3, 2010, Musik2MyEyes (192)By person wrote:

    Okay every so often there is one that stirs things that you thought you had under control. This made me cry. It was beautiful.

  • Malcholm Dark On Saturday, April 3, 2010, Malcholm Dark (806)By person wrote:

    Fantastic! I love the fact you are there saying the things you need to, although you remain conflicted about it... a brilliant piece of writing.... "with a handful of stolen lines, talking to ghosts who have nothing to say"... thanks, this line will stay with me for a long while...

  • A former member wrote: palms up....in admiration. I loved the development, It reminded me of "a noiseless patient spider" I think it's called by Whitman, which enlivened and enriched the read. Funny, we posted such similar writes so closely. Very artful, patiently developed with care, precision and craft. *bows before enchanting craftswoman*

  • A former member wrote: I like the stuttering (heaven?) early on... and, yes, the stolen lilies.... the easter flower... and the abandoned spirit... mmmm your skin... must be like your thoughts..... a grave worth dying for, doubtless..... such a powerful metaphor there.

  • Narcissa On Sunday, April 4, 2010, Narcissa (391)By person wrote:

    however my words flow they can never compare to yours...thank you...thank all of you.


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