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choking on stars
By AnotherWitheredRose
im scared by the scars of time
if our callased hearts were to collide
could i part my chapped lips enough for yours to fit inbetween
could i re-open the wounds of love
to let these emotions bleed
i want to feel this
complete with the pain
if i was numb there wouldnt be anything to gain
i want to feel you
under your body i shake
your. hands . awake. me. from .my slumber...
could you strangle me alittle harder...i can still breathe
theres something magical about your eyes
it feels like im falling from the sky
.......picking up speed and choking on stars.......
maybe i dont know exactly how much it means to have you here
but as you pull me from my dark illusions theres nothing left to fear
i think you hold me just above goodbye
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© 2005 AnotherWitheredRose
Published on Saturday, November 12, 2005.
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On Wednesday, January 6, 2010, Wiccad
(124)
wrote:
I love the title, makes me imagine how painful that would be. Great job............Koodos
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On Thursday, July 16, 2009, surething
(51) wrote:
this has such a wonderful flow to it, the rhythm is perfect. the word choice in conjunction with the flow is lovely. such a touching piece.
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A former member wrote:
i love the end line, i love it all... i have been choking on stars and now i want to be numb, it just shows how different the perspective of some can be, yet they can relate still. Amazing choice of words, variety of structure, i cannot fault it!
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On Wednesday, November 23, 2005, Myrrhkuri the fallen one
(94) wrote:
very beautiful poem!!!
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On Monday, November 14, 2005, Grey Lies
(185) wrote:
magnificent...my heart tears at the words you've created. it flows within my heart...i love it!...it captures the feeling i feel now.
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A former member wrote:
"i think you hold me just above goodbye" damn...such beauty transfixed into every word you have uttered...I cannot just let this fade from my memory...I gotta fave it. Beautiful. *Evangel*
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On Saturday, November 12, 2005, AniDayz
(812) wrote:
wonderous,flowing.beautifuly...magestic,in sort...amehtyst current...pulling...out from within...embedding an emblem upon a tapestry...synchronised in breath [shared]...renewed.this breathes enigmatically,yet, so simply:wonderfulfeel.
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On Saturday, November 12, 2005, Forgotten Angel
(309) wrote:
wow...this is great..i love it...it reflects how i feel sometimes..wow..this is just too good for words..great job! -Kel
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A former member wrote:
usually i hate rhyme, but this read out flawlessly- "theres something magical about your eyes /it feels like im falling from the sky /.......picking up speed and choking on stars......." this was lovely..in reading, i, too, am choking on the stars in this
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A former member wrote:
piece of beauty.
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