Under Crimson Eyes

By RubyXero

"Did it hurt?"
"Don't say it" she warns.
(here it comes)
..."when you fell from heaven?"
The highest rate per hour
couldn't conceal the knife pierced
disdain from her eyes.
A slight tilt
and expansion of her pupils
divesting her facade,
as irises tint crimson.
whispers "Heaven is not where I reign..."
Laughing. he strolls away.

*enticing little man...
So oblivious...*

Line after line,
he blurts as he passes.
Each attempt met with
a cool smile.

At 11th strike
she leaves to her car...
paying no mind to
the eyes baring into her back...

A thrice, knock
knocking at his door.
Sluggish in drowsy partial-sleep
he creaks it open.
Blasted by
glacial winds...
instantly freezing
every pore,
bone and vein
throughout his entire being.

No person to claim the knock.
No body in this hallway.

Seconds passing,
as he attempts to
regain control.
To just. move!

Finally turning back into
his hotel room.
3:00am the clock reminds.
Laying down in bed;
shaking the events.
Curling into the blankets
to thaw his iced body.

Staring into the darkness,
and suddenly bright,
glowing scarlet eyes bare
into his.
Startled! trying to move...
Paralysis has consumed him.
Helpless. Completely.

She lightens the room
a bit.
Basking in treats to come.
As she unrobes,
keeping his attention...

Perfect in form.
demonic in nature
A creature of mystery
with sinister yearnings.

Wearing only her skin now,
straddling this aroused,
yet terrified human.
Slowly she leans down.
Closing in...
to his ear.

With 5 voices
and a hissing undertone,
again she whispers...

"On this night.
dark as the dead. with
only muffled air and solid walls
to mock. your pleas.
I have but one request.


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© 2008 RubyXero
Published on Thursday, May 22, 2008.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Elizabeth kaczocha On Monday, August 26, 2019, Elizabeth kaczocha (23)By person wrote:

    Great story line. I really got into it.great job!

  • Dominic On Monday, April 30, 2012, Dominic (61)By person wrote:

    Sexy in a non cliched intensely sensual way. Somewhere between sex and death?

  • Squishy On Monday, April 9, 2012, Squishy (41)By person wrote:

    this is realy good it flows very well and it just expresses so well lovely :) thanks

  • A former member wrote: This was lovely. Nice work Ruby. It flows nicely and sounds right in my head.

  • Magdalena On Tuesday, January 17, 2012, Magdalena (784)By person wrote:

    Spine chilling. I really enjoyed reading this excellent write.

  • Kaleidoscope_Heart On Monday, August 11, 2008, Kaleidoscope_Heart (117)By person wrote:

    I think I am going crazy cause I could have sworn I posted a comment. Anyway, abolutely intoxicating and seductive.

  • Kaleidoscope_Heart On Monday, August 11, 2008, Kaleidoscope_Heart (117)By person wrote:

    AND, the language you use sucks the reader right in. I felt like the images were dancing in front of me. Indeed a woman to die for ;)

  • Withering petals On Monday, June 9, 2008, Withering petals (69)By person wrote:

    kept me clinging on to each coming word, beautiful crimson fluency and a pleasantly sharp ending. Wonderful work (and thank you for the welcome to DP!) It's a pleasure to be able to read your work ~Downstream~

  • A former member wrote: omg. that was awesome. ^_^ kudos on the writing. thnx fer the comments.

  • A former member wrote: Incredible write....erotic....animalistic yet humane.

  • MESUN On Tuesday, May 27, 2008, MESUN (232)By person wrote:

    Yes, yes, yes, yes, fucking yes! Now that just pulled me along and WHAM! That last stanza and final verse, damn, amazing. I felt the cold and I felt the comfort of being back bed, and then the fear and excitement. Awesome.

  • Chaos God On Sunday, May 25, 2008, Chaos God (521)By person wrote:

    Oh My Fucking God This Is Hot. It Sent Shivers Up My Spine, Thanks For The Read!

  • Sketso On Thursday, May 22, 2008, Sketso (454)By person wrote:

    I just wonder, would it have been his "pleas" or his "please". HA! Amusing and chilling all at once.

  • Taunting The Reaper On Thursday, May 22, 2008, Taunting The Reaper (188)By person wrote:

    Kinky...LOL, me likes :) I love the way the tension builds up and the way you delivered the last part. Ice cold yet blazing hot.

  • A former member wrote: Strap me in baby, i'm up for some demonic sex, I think the 'exorcist scene' said it best "fuck me...fuck me"...and i'll scream... if you do too. - hmmm feel like some pop corn now...enjoyed;)

  • Fantecstasy On Thursday, May 22, 2008, Fantecstasy (128)By person wrote:

    In-*expletive*-credible. I haven't read something that has appealed this much to me on here in a while. *Tips hat twice*

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