Salvo.

By Aleas

Yesterday / past
With hardly a word
Or a thought
But I couldn't decide whether that was a small mercy or not
So when she woke she turned to me and locked the whites between bloodshot and smile
And told me to tell her something beautiful

So...

...I drew back my lips

...Cocked a shotgun tongue

...Aimed dead center mass for a three round burst

But before I could fire she stormed through my lines with her own two round volley of torrential ferver that landed just under the clef of my left jawline
And did not stop the onslaught until I relented and burned
From the heart out
Relaxed my neck, head tilt back
By the by
As I felt my armed maw slide
Into another suicide.

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Copyright 2010 Aleas
Published on Wednesday, February 24, 2010.     Filed under: "Poetry"

Author's Note:

Thanks Lydia Jade for letting me work through in chat!
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  • A former member wrote: Loved it...:)

  • A former member wrote: This is unmistakeably brilliant...but I would like to know what it's about exactly. Your work seems to have a secret you like to keep.

  • Vicious Pixie On Thursday, April 29, 2010, Vicious Pixie (58)By person wrote:

    Raw and Slinky...If Tarantino translated his madness into poetry, I assume it would taste something like this

  • Malcholm Dark On Thursday, March 11, 2010, Malcholm Dark (806)By person wrote:

    Well done, I love the tie in with the shot-gun, brilliant. The flow was great, thanks for the write.

  • Dilated View On Thursday, February 25, 2010, Dilated View (582)By person wrote:

    Damn man this was chaotic I felt like I walked into the middle of a back alley brawl while trying to take a stroll on your memory lane. Fantastic visuals you wove throughout. Very well done.

  • RubyXero On Wednesday, February 24, 2010, RubyXero (481)By person wrote:

    well i wasn't expecting that last stanza. What a piece. Amazing description and great ending.

  • A former member wrote: I have no words to do this justice. How you get here, I don't know but your lines dig and your meaning is beyond what my heart can comprehend. I love it...

  • A former member wrote: gawds, that's feverish and instantly immediately. . .. . loving.

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