I want you to lay still
By Taunting The Reaper
The morning light sweeps through cold glass
and playfully licks your face.
(I want you to lay still.)
This timeless moment...
watching you lie there
right before the world steals you
(from me).
This is my moment.
I claim it with all that I am
because watching you dream fills my soul
until
I’m someone.
I’m so jealous.
This dream that keeps you
(from me)
doesn’t deserve you.
I’m so thankful.
While you dream I sit here
watching so I can dream
(awake).
This is my vision:
Watching you slowly open your eyes
as though you were born this very moment.
I become part of your world today
while those sleepy eyes shame the daylight
as they drink in the sun.
I want you to lay there
just another moment
because I’ll never have this moment again
and I finally understand
that this
moment...
was all I ever had.
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Comments on "I want you to lay still"
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On Friday, August 12, 2011, Devilish
(2657) wrote:
Yes this is nice!!!
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A former member wrote:
brilliantly , beautifully written , i enjoyed this , thank you for sharing
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On Thursday, February 7, 2008, thelostmessenger
(112) wrote:
beautiful. i love writing about a single moment. here, you did it extrememly well. i loved the first and last lines. nice write. *messenger
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On Sunday, January 27, 2008, MESUN
(230) wrote:
quite a beautiful write. made me very nostalgic for such brief moments as this in my past. with bittersweet intent though i shall let them go and look to future ones. nicely done.
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On Sunday, December 9, 2007, Narcissa
(404) wrote:
Moments like this are priceless - wonderful.
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On Thursday, December 6, 2007, Kaleidoscope_Heart
(111) wrote:
Typos lol. - At the end I went.
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On Thursday, December 6, 2007, Kaleidoscope_Heart
(111) wrote:
The desire and passion is so lucid and endearing. The imagery was clear and the immense emotions were breathtaking. I love the way you decribe the feeling towards the dreams and the sunlight. At the end I was I went awwww lol. It was intense, then heartbreaking. Lovely
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On Thursday, December 6, 2007, ReddropX
(20) wrote:
The longing is intense. I love this.