oil to flame [and star studded ashes]
By Six-Out
the stars.
they look dim tonight.
and I spit on Van Gogh for his false hopes.
as they gasp for breath. I blink.
and hope that they'll revive.
I drink. and toast to lost hopes.
and remorse.
my tears are caught in my eyes.
and the sky is growing blured with the passing minutes.
playing connect the dots with my cigarette
and my fingers begin to ache.
I hate these words I speak with ink
and metaphor.
but I love the way they sound
when my tongues goes dry- and my lips crack.
voice quivers. and I get lost in
tribulation.
translation: I feel cheated.
and the stars scream to me- 'I will let you down'
lines that I've fed to myself. and I've never failed.
at least I cared.
to begin with.
this is no more art than the stars.
and they're as dead.
as these words.
only I'll burn out long before
anyone can call me beautiful.
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Comments on "oil to flame [and star studded ashes]"
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A former member wrote:
gawds, those last two stanzas...the quiet refrain of exploding internal pain; black and hole.ish. . .. the vortex that eats away at our esoteric peace. amazing-wrenching.
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On Friday, February 8, 2008, Dysphoria
(88) wrote:
You are beautiful, and so are the words you write, the way you think. It's so hard to find the right words to say but your words blow my mind, I love it.
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On Monday, December 24, 2007, italianbella
(183) wrote:
you touch my heart with youre pen This is an amazing write once again:)
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On Sunday, September 9, 2007, DoctorAsh
(371) wrote:
Man, I haven't read one your works in quite some time, and this is absolutely beautiful - it's so suttley painful as a distant injury is, beneath the skin, bruised, yet shrieking with pain ever time your hand passes over it to determine the range.
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On Sunday, September 9, 2007, DoctorAsh
(371) wrote:
This is a true piece of poetry Jon. Superbish. Daniel
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A former member wrote:
i want to love you.
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A former member wrote:
You choke me helpless. I can't believe we share the same stars.
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A former member wrote:
I believe I have already done that..and you seem to still draw breath, luv. `Div
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On Sunday, June 25, 2006, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
Jon-boy, I never rate anything if it isn't a ten. If there was an eleven on that bar, you'd get it easy. Dude, you crumble mountains with a pen. Those last two stanzas were simply breathtaking. I have them memorized. Your something else, man.
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On Thursday, June 22, 2006, PaperPromises
(53) wrote:
"I hate these words I speak." perhaps, perhaps dear friend, but I on the other hand love and cherish them with all of my heart. -Cor
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A former member wrote:
"I spit on Van Gogh for his false hopes.
as they gasp for breath. I blink. and hope that they'll revive." fuck, you've such a way with words, jon..this was so beautiful and sad. your imagery is fucking fantastic as always.
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On Tuesday, June 20, 2006, AniDayz
(812) wrote:
life and the turntables, the disconcertion and devestation...burning...like hope inside veins of immortality...youre potent, youre poetically.power.FULL...this hits like a fukking cementblock upon my chest...
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A former member wrote:
b E a utiful!! *sigh* the heartbreak within this is.... ~Tamara
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A former member wrote:
Fuck man. At least you'll have turned a few heads along the way, even if just long enough to notice a catastrophe with a lingering aftertaste. ~Ryan
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On Saturday, June 17, 2006, Vicious Pixie
(58) wrote:
oh, baby....this just squeezsd my soul. so beautiful, so painfull...good stuff man.
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A former member wrote:
Very poignant. Easily the most reflective work that I've read today. Makes me feel like weeping...
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On Saturday, June 17, 2006, Cattarax
(210) wrote:
Jon .... this is amazing .. and when she wins over your heart and you give it to her ... she will be one lucky women
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On Saturday, June 17, 2006, elisa
(1595) wrote:
buried beneath a starlight graveyard ... writing poetry.....you stare darkness in the face without flinching......i barely survive your words.
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On Saturday, June 17, 2006, sIo
(898) wrote:
.....my heart just broke.
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On Saturday, June 17, 2006, PoeticHellion
(191) wrote:
You are and always will be beautiful. I love you, Jon.