Blackened Sky
By cre
I had been staring for awhile
when I realized the black absorbing my eyes
Wasn't really black after all
And possibly (I thought) more than that was lies
Odd, the leaf to my left (green?)
"alone on the end of a lonely limb"
Compared to what - the black I guess
Colorings based on some paintbrushed whim
Trailing of digits through time and space
Then again, not - as the fingers themselves make that so
And "through a moment" - no - through many
Though it seems like one - what the mind doesn't know
Redirecting misdirected (hijacked) attention
(with care) - knowledge of an obsequious bent
To this tricky attractor (vanity's enabler)
An addictive (though not always vindictive) intent
Randomly resting appendage (palm down)
Magnetic (it seems) to yesterday's crumbled shells
False convictions breeding fuck-you evictions
When even heaven might be someone's hell
Surveying, (glance straying) , for no good reason
Supposing, I guess, that I am seeing
But without knowing the author
I wonder if I can truly glean the meaning
What a leap, assuming - assumptions (great)
Though random settles with a satisfactory "click"
Perusing the plausible - annoyingly unnecessary
Yet answering the need to see how things "tick"
I had been staring for awhile
when I realized the scene (in its twisted disguise)
Wasn't much more (or less) than truth or tale
And the black was just my (sleeping) eyes.
Comments on "Blackened Sky"
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On Wednesday, October 5, 2011, Ortolan
(214) wrote:
That's just my style, only you structured it better with the punctuation.Good job.
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On Wednesday, January 16, 2008, Circe Avalon
(115) wrote:
It was twisting and laps onto it's self. like a spiral staircase, I liked it, I always like great architecture.
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On Sunday, October 26, 2003, Demosthenes
(155) wrote:
yknow. in addition to the dave groupie t-shirts, i think i may have to make cre groupie t-shirts now. -B
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A former member wrote:
nicely done. :)
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On Sunday, March 30, 2003, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
Blah. I hate you. Why must you be so damn good. Grr. lol. Later Jane.
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On Saturday, April 5, 2003, Armand
(54) wrote:
if i didnt know better, i would have thought you stole this gem from a buried chest of dylan thomas' unpublished works. wow... you took such a mundane event and painted a masterpiece. excellent use of parentheses.
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A former member wrote:
Reminds me of the thought that maybe those thought to be insane are the only sane ones.
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A former member wrote:
youre an amazing poet
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On Wednesday, March 26, 2003, Jonas
(715) wrote:
this comment will not much be deep... this poem reminds me of really excellent weed.
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On Wednesday, March 26, 2003, manywalks
(747) wrote:
I found the third stanza to be exceptional; superb work, thanks.