broken bottles and starless skies

By Six-Out

your lips burn my throat
as I beg of you :kiss me again

sweet surrender in golden arcs of time
drag your tired heart across my soul
as we lay on the dashboards of this place
watching the stars dance in the sky
it seems worth it, at times like this
doesn't it?


such lies we tell ourselves when we're naive
and alone in a void of life

just this once I'd like to ask of the gods
to spare me the sun tomorrow morning
-maybe paint the sky with a plastic silhouette


dream until forever- as we watch tomorrow die
is that a smile I see? no, couldn't be
for the likes of a life with no stars in the sky
is like a heart with no knife buried inside

look down the bottom of another bottle
and make it all go away

because it's hard to care, when you can't remember

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Copyright 2004 Six-Out
Published on Friday, October 22, 2004.     Filed under: "Depressed" and "Poetry"
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  • Riven Waker On Saturday, January 23, 2010, Riven Waker (348)By person wrote:

    absolutely beautiful - so many classic memorable lines - nicely done

  • LiP Stiches On Monday, September 26, 2005, LiP Stiches (42)By person wrote:

    so bueautiful it brings potential tears to my eyes...."-maybe paint the sky with a plastic silhouette"....damn that is GOOD!

  • Angelic Darkness On Saturday, December 18, 2004, Angelic Darkness (28)By person wrote:

    A greatly painted picture for the minds eyes. Wonderful. ~*~Angie~*~

  • A former member wrote: Wow....................................................................................................................

  • A former member wrote: --woven images that are simply exquisite. I am utterly impressed. A flawless work.~ Rose.

  • A former member wrote: "just this once I'd like to ask of the gods to spare me the sun tomorrow morning -maybe paint the sky with a plastic silhouette"; This is absoloute magnificence. I don't believe that poetry gets much better than this. Every line was stunningly crafted . .

  • BeautifulCalamity On Monday, November 1, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (434)By person wrote:

    "...no stars in the sky is like a heart with no knife buried inside"-- this is a truly beautiful piece.. well done..

  • Derelict Dream On Monday, October 25, 2004, Derelict Dream (38)By person wrote:

    "dream until forever" Very provocative and colorful, has a very nice feel to it. Super job

  • A former member wrote: poetry at its best. this poem is great

  • K_Love On Saturday, October 23, 2004, K_Love (529)By person wrote:

    "such lies we tell ourselves when we're naive and alone in a void of life" Damn... So thruthful and painful. Well done.

  • A former member wrote: such lies we tell ourselves when we're naive and alone in a void of life this is my favorite part. god damn man i love your shit.

  • A former member wrote: I have a lump in my throat that I can't swallow. I'm afraid if I do, I will start to cry. This piece spoke to me. I know that so well...hiding from yourself.

  • BleedSilver On Friday, October 22, 2004, BleedSilver (299)By person wrote:

    Dude...this is definately sadder than what I could write...This makes me feel really old...I been to the bottom of a few bottles, and this piece seems to come straight from the heart of an alcoholic...Great job.

  • Lotophagi On Friday, October 22, 2004, Lotophagi (341)By person wrote:

    I've read this a dozen times, and still I find more within it, it's cleverly crafted and laden with astounding metaphors... I feel tired, old and melancholy from reading this, thank you.

  • knightmirror On Friday, October 22, 2004, knightmirror (432)By person wrote:

    delicately dangerous write here mothatha....such tender pain seeps from this in every direction.....goodjob....****-chris

  • A former member wrote: "dream until forever- as we watch tomorrow die" fuck yeah foo! awesome. you really can write can't you.

  • glasshouse On Friday, October 22, 2004, glasshouse (568)By person wrote:

    I debated on whether or not to comment on this piece. But it is seriously great. "-maybe paint the sky with a plastic silhouette" Nicely executed. -Glass


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