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I am the [myth]
By Six-Out
nicotine dreams and the absence of denial
cast like a seascape of something
/better than -(nothing)
are there enough words left to pray
an epiphany of sorts
of what was there before you knew it
the single touch from the god of your yesterday
as words fall down around you
a glass house that shatters so easily
when your breath is a stone
you are your own broken dreams
watching your sanity slip with every glimmer of hope
trying to reconstruct what has fallen
in the shadow of a long lost muse
mocking indiscretions
as the smoke rises from the tray
the ashes fall into obscurity
I am this pain
can you feel me breaking you
I am the [myth] of a better two.morrow
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Inspired by a few words exchanged with wonderlandhysteria
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Copyright 2004 Six-Out
Published on Wednesday, August 25, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "I am the [myth]"
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On Thursday, March 14, 2013, Manperson96
(23)
wrote:
Absolutely superb. I love your work.
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A former member wrote:
damn, the last 2 lines were pretty powerful. this is a very good poem!
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On Friday, September 3, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti
(341) wrote:
this is astounding work...you never cease to surprise me..the greatness of your craft grows exponentially... "I am this pain can you feel me breaking you"...was particularly heartfelt...-l-
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On Saturday, August 28, 2004, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
Very awesome write. The lines Armand indicated, the fourth line, and the last line were particularly impressive. Great job... kick ass... but don't forget to let it go in the end ;)
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On Saturday, August 28, 2004, Armand
(57) wrote:
you have masterfully weaved the smoking theme thru this very powerful piece. your brilliant "glass house...stone" metaphor is what inspires mediocre plagiarism that can never match such an amazing arrangement of words. very impressive write.
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On Thursday, August 26, 2004, urbanhumility
(1175) wrote:
fucking brilliant........your intellect comforts my yearning eyes.........your sight is keen.......urban
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On Thursday, August 26, 2004, elisa
(1616) wrote:
I love how you write of yourself as pain...it gives you a kinda ghost like ambient. oh I like your fingers running through my head;) elisa
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On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, ashottothetemple
(37) wrote:
That's an amazing work, I really admire your writing.. I give you much respect. )(Spirett)(
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A former member wrote:
Oh, Six...this is, by far, my favorite of yours...probably because it had so much personal meaning beyond it...brilliantly expressed. *adds*
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A former member wrote:
Mmm I love the second stanza, it seems to be so fragile and full of delicate beautiful-ness. And the rest is just fucking awesome. "I am this pain..can you feel me breaking you".. I don't need to tell you, you rule. :P ~Doped-up-Wishy
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On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Dommi
(96) wrote:
ooh.. very good.. I suppose I'm not surprised much.. meh.
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On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Zhee
(529) wrote:
wonderfully written.. it was actually so similar to something i had written that it was reliving the moment all over again... great job!
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On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Jonas
(720) wrote:
you've improved quite dramatically since i started reading you. you are still a fag, but that's ok, cause you write very well. the glass house/stone breath line was stunningly beautirific.
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On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Solace
(1069) wrote:
"when your breath is a stone" was just par excellence!!!! This is wreathed in the smoke of excellence...fantastic...
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A former member wrote:
I love it six, I love the flow and style its in, ***** from me... -Jeremy
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