Higher than Virginity
By Mute Serenade
I spoke amongst the stars
Rolling pebbles on my fingertips
Foraging for depth
In the breeze of volumes you breathed.
The air followed no formula
I inhaled, choking on fireflies
As they only manage to gleam
When I turn away
Sopping wet from misconstrusions
The sweat dripping onto me
Tastes like lies
Reaking a proof, percent and concentration
My liver couldn't fathom
And you say to me
"A sunrise compares not
To dusk
Anyway.
A girl such as you
Has many an opportunity
To catch a glimpse."
I plead to disagree
As the fireflies retreat to slumber
I plea to myself
To fake enthusiasm
A little bit better.
And I slip fire down
Swallow silently
Knowing well,
I will save my sunrise for another day....
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Copyright 2004 Mute Serenade
Published on Monday, August 2, 2004.
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On Saturday, October 21, 2017, carlosjackal
(2788) wrote:
This is one of those works where it's so hard to comment afterwards other than to say, this was tangible and felt.
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On Tuesday, September 14, 2004, Munkey
(79) wrote:
Wow with SIX I agree this is very intense. I love it. It is almost beyond words and the words that I think of can't even compare. Keep it dark. -Munkey-
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On Thursday, August 12, 2004, sixsixnine
(476) wrote:
fucking INTENSE! LOVE the way it feels to read this so raw.. so rare..tells me right now i don't care! but tommorrow bet your ass i will dare! AWESOMe!!! *669*
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On Saturday, August 7, 2004, capt_funguy
(777) wrote:
item one on a shortlist within a long list of things that weren't supposed to happen .. pinpoints of hope need to be held and protected as the hailstorm has you stinging
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On Saturday, August 7, 2004, capt_funguy
(777) wrote:
all over ... minutes turn hours turn years ... but there is more , there is daybreak , there is "after" ... everything washes away enough to feel the sun's warmth ... this work bashed my brains in ... yeah ...it did ... songsung ... funguy
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On Monday, August 2, 2004, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
excellent write! i particularly love the penultimate stanza: those last three lines i know all too well. beautifully done.
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On Monday, August 2, 2004, violetflames
(10) wrote:
wow. That is absolutely gorgeous.
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On Monday, August 2, 2004, Anth
(1126) wrote:
i love the wording of this,stylishly crafted and greatly described imagery,and i liked the qouted verse,superb
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On Monday, August 2, 2004, Soulseeker
(108) wrote:
Wow... It's a gift to be able to describe such a thing without really having to say what you are talking about. A wonderful write... Bethany