Higher than Virginity

By Mute Serenade

I spoke amongst the stars
Rolling pebbles on my fingertips
Foraging for depth
In the breeze of volumes you breathed.

The air followed no formula
I inhaled, choking on fireflies
As they only manage to gleam
When I turn away

Sopping wet from misconstrusions
The sweat dripping onto me
Tastes like lies
Reaking a proof, percent and concentration
My liver couldn't fathom

And you say to me
"A sunrise compares not
To dusk
Anyway.
A girl such as you
Has many an opportunity
To catch a glimpse."

I plead to disagree
As the fireflies retreat to slumber
I plea to myself
To fake enthusiasm
A little bit better.

And I slip fire down
Swallow silently
Knowing well,
I will save my sunrise for another day....

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Copyright 2004 Mute Serenade
Published on Monday, August 2, 2004.     Filed under:
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  • carlosjackal On Saturday, October 21, 2017, carlosjackal (2788)By person wrote:

    This is one of those works where it's so hard to comment afterwards other than to say, this was tangible and felt.

  • Munkey On Tuesday, September 14, 2004, Munkey (79)By person wrote:

    Wow with SIX I agree this is very intense. I love it. It is almost beyond words and the words that I think of can't even compare. Keep it dark. -Munkey-

  • sixsixnine On Thursday, August 12, 2004, sixsixnine (476)By person wrote:

    fucking INTENSE! LOVE the way it feels to read this so raw.. so rare..tells me right now i don't care! but tommorrow bet your ass i will dare! AWESOMe!!! *669*

  • capt_funguy On Saturday, August 7, 2004, capt_funguy (777)By person wrote:

    item one on a shortlist within a long list of things that weren't supposed to happen .. pinpoints of hope need to be held and protected as the hailstorm has you stinging

  • capt_funguy On Saturday, August 7, 2004, capt_funguy (777)By person wrote:

    all over ... minutes turn hours turn years ... but there is more , there is daybreak , there is "after" ... everything washes away enough to feel the sun's warmth ... this work bashed my brains in ... yeah ...it did ... songsung ... funguy

  • purr_verse On Monday, August 2, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    excellent write! i particularly love the penultimate stanza: those last three lines i know all too well. beautifully done.

  • violetflames On Monday, August 2, 2004, violetflames (10)By person wrote:

    wow. That is absolutely gorgeous.

  • Anth On Monday, August 2, 2004, Anth (1126)By person wrote:

    i love the wording of this,stylishly crafted and greatly described imagery,and i liked the qouted verse,superb

  • Soulseeker On Monday, August 2, 2004, Soulseeker (108)By person wrote:

    Wow... It's a gift to be able to describe such a thing without really having to say what you are talking about. A wonderful write... Bethany


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