Now I lay me...
By Dommi
Now I lay me down to sleep
I pray you'll hold me as I weep
A dream that I've tried hard to keep
From fading from my skull
In my thoughts I'm not the same
I change behind undying names
Writing will forever tame
The wild stars inside
If I could just try to break through
And reach my hand out to touch you
I'd remember skies of blue
And who I was before
But strings of veins hold me in place
As tears of black fall from my face
It's you I can never replace
As I crumble to my floor
A mass of sobbing cut-up flesh
Set apart from all the rest
Swallowed by my lonliness
Within my carbon walls
My only warmth is in my cage
I spill my blood out on the page
It speaks of all I cannot say
My sweetest wine of words
So now I lay me down to cry
A mind curls up to slowly die
Another day has passed me by
And all the gates are locked...
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Comments on "Now I lay me..."
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On Wednesday, October 22, 2014, drasticdaydreams
(55) wrote:
Love the second stanza particularly. And the last line was a beautiful finish. Melancholic. Perfect rhythm.
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On Sunday, February 10, 2013, Star
(879) wrote:
hauntingly beautiful. i love the lullaby vibe in this.. (:
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On Sunday, February 10, 2013, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
Absolutely perfect miss..
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On Friday, November 2, 2012, MorganaRose
(75) wrote:
A great write....haunting lullaby...Thanks for sharing!~
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A former member wrote:
You've always developed a careful balance between structure, form, and content, subject.... smoothly you blend these into classical verses of contemporary pain... very well done, ms dom *bows before the dominatrix*
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On Thursday, February 25, 2010, Rowan
(197) wrote:
Wow. Simply amazing.
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On Saturday, January 23, 2010, Wiccad
(124) wrote:
Every word screams to me and through me..........loved it.
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On Thursday, December 31, 2009, Dilated View
(582) wrote:
This made my heart hurt. The second to last stanza was my favorite but well crafted all around. Write on :)
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On Monday, March 17, 2008, Circe Avalon
(115) wrote:
I love how everything flows so well. Very good work a masterpiece!
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On Thursday, August 30, 2007, Sketso
(416) wrote:
...by my own steady hands. Interesting.
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A former member wrote:
holy cow this is awsome and i fucking loovvee it..thanks for writing it~Amanda~
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A former member wrote:
this is amazing
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A former member wrote:
Well I've checked out quite a few of your writing and I must say: "I Like ... a lot"
I'll be sure to return, you are inspirational. THNX again. Moptzar.
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A former member wrote:
beautiful
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On Saturday, February 25, 2006, xserratedsoulx
(212) wrote:
thank you for writing this!!!! ~lauren~
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On Saturday, February 25, 2006, xserratedsoulx
(212) wrote:
words fail me...it steals my breath... "But strings of veins hold me in place As tears of black fall from my face" "my sweetest wine of words" *shivers* ~lauren~
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A former member wrote:
from the inside......sorry the poem made me do it! i wouldn't have said it otherwise :) i love this piece
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On Thursday, February 9, 2006, xserratedsoulx
(212) wrote:
ps--bookmarked it! ~lauren~
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On Thursday, February 9, 2006, xserratedsoulx
(212) wrote:
amazing. everything i could ever hope to write. ~lauren~
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A former member wrote:
wow i loved it
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A former member wrote:
Its so sad, yet so beatiful
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On Wednesday, June 1, 2005, Soulfire
(96) wrote:
So sad...but this fits me perfectly today. Thank you.
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On Monday, May 23, 2005, peril_notion
(87) wrote:
I love this... nicely done. ~Heather
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On Monday, May 23, 2005, Serenity
(469) wrote:
This is beautiful.
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A former member wrote:
this is an amazing write!~nrk~
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On Sunday, February 6, 2005, Sticky Kitty
(241) wrote:
nice rhyming scheme -kitty
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On Saturday, February 5, 2005, Alacer_Cogitatus
(140) wrote:
verry awesome. A_C
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On Sunday, January 30, 2005, LovelyAssassinx
(151) wrote:
I love this write so much. *faves it*~Unlucky
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On Friday, January 28, 2005, island warrior
(210) wrote:
Totally awesome.