A dying mind

By nightshade

Everything in life is a choice
By choosing right or wrong you give it a voice
You say it wasn’t an option you can’t control what you do
always hurting those closest to you
There were unhallowed secrets you wished to preserve
She loved you more than you could ever deserve
Making another person start over again
You turned from your lover to her best friend
Watching behind you cringing at every sound
How could you presume that you wouldn’t be found
You’ve finally shut the last door
Blood spilt upon the floor
You think of all you must leave behind
As Darkness envelopes the dying mind


**I actually wrote this one starting from the last vers to the first**

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Copyright 2004 nightshade
Published on Monday, March 1, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • carlosjackal On Tuesday, December 6, 2016, carlosjackal (2609)By person wrote:

    This reads like a great lesson in love, one we can all learn from when we gradually fall out of love with someone. Very good work.

  • 10 Forty Three On Friday, November 18, 2016, 10 Forty Three (721)By person wrote:

    Why had I not read this until now? I read it from end to beginning and then from beginning to end. That is very impressive. Well done! - 10:43

  • Ashteroth On Wednesday, September 15, 2010, Ashteroth (193)By person wrote:

    Interesting, must try this style myself. I the concept of giving these things a voice like it is neutral and inanimate before we poor our will into it ~Ash

  • A former member wrote: no doubt a palindrome poem! bravo!! I read it bottom up, and then I slowly let my mouth feel the words from the top down.... yummy

  • Midnight Phoenix On Monday, May 10, 2004, Midnight Phoenix (240)By person wrote:

    Last verse to the first... I admire your creativity. This turned out very well all the way from the end to the beginning.

  • Spiritus_Frumenti On Saturday, March 20, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti (338)By person wrote:

    An impressive feat in technicality...combined with the truthful and contemplative feel to this piece..all in all it makes it amazing in every angle...-l-

  • finaldestiny On Wednesday, March 17, 2004, finaldestiny (74)By person wrote:

    wow that was an impressive piece there, it actually made me think which i have to say is amazing. then I read it backwards and it was just as good lol.The Last line says so much in few words. nice write ~finaldestiny~

  • nell On Saturday, March 13, 2004, nell (273)By person wrote:

    this was wicked and when i read it bottom to top it's even better=P

  • knightmirror On Wednesday, March 3, 2004, knightmirror (427)By person wrote:

    beautiful write.i felt everything you wrote cause i hurt someone i loved very much and now i'm alone.**** knight

  • nightshade On Sunday, September 19, 2010, nightshade (123)By person wrote:

    no knight we are never alone and neither are you talk to me anytime you need ~night~

  • BoldSolitude On Wednesday, March 3, 2004, BoldSolitude (214)By person wrote:

    I agree with pessum, impressive for a poem to sound right forward or backwards.

  • pessum ire animus On Tuesday, March 2, 2004, pessum ire animus (57)By person wrote:

    whoa... that was amazing... just read it backwards after forwards... cant say many people can do that. fucking awesome.

  • OLd SouL On Tuesday, March 2, 2004, OLd SouL (734)By person wrote:

    Hey this was pretty cool.. I read it forward, backwards, sidewards...errmm. delicious every way. :) :::OLd

  • PointlessX On Monday, March 1, 2004, PointlessX (36)By person wrote:

    "..She loved you more than you could ever deserve.." --more than just a great write!!--PointlessX

  • Drea On Monday, March 1, 2004, Drea (1486)By person wrote:

    i really like this. the flow is done well. the words speak volumes. wonderful. ~Drea~

  • A former member wrote: The story you conjure is relevant to everyone in some way and mine in many. Another thing I must add is that you acheived making the aa bb cc dd rhyme scheme work amazingly and not seem boring, big kudos on that. +T.P.U+

  • A former member wrote: Very nicely done. I like it. The last verse is my favorite.


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