unloved child
By darkangelXlll
weak wounded shattered and tarred apart powerless and repulsively miss treated lost and afraid full of remorse sad memories bad dreams and sleepless nights of horror captured by fantasies and graceful hands shoved and pushed to the side to be alone alone to sleep wake eat live and die pushed to the misery pushed to the pain that has been grounded and pierced so deep inside her soul she lost her will to fight back she lost her wishes dreams and most wanted desires this girl this poor angelic child that has been thrown to the corner and icealated from the world this tyke that has been fighting and fighting wars after wars till she got tiered till she finally gave up what's left for this foursome helpless child without a future without any hope will she be left out in the pouring rain standing all alone shivering of fear hunger and the cold misty wind wining harder and harder every time as she stands there getting colder and colder her life slowly begins to fade away wont anyone do anything about it wont anyone try to help her?
Comments on "unloved child"
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On Saturday, October 8, 2005, Spyral
(24) wrote:
All I can say is moving. absolutly powerfull emotion, and feeling that it jus seems to rip out of the reader
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A former member wrote:
Your works are so incredibly powerful...they evoke so many emotions in your readers, as is evident by the comments you have already received...my only suggestion is to improve your titles a bit to draw the reader in... =)
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A former member wrote:
the way you put it makes ya wanna cry for the child and jump in and save it! i love tthe way ya word stuff! ~!~Shivers~!` amazing work
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On Saturday, September 11, 2004, Munkey
(79) wrote:
I would give my life for that unloved child, for every needs love and deserves it. -Chance-
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On Friday, April 2, 2004, Necromancer
(71) wrote:
you work is wonderful *kisses angel's feet. I love it your highness. ~Justin
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On Wednesday, March 31, 2004, Mistress Morbid
(405) wrote:
Very interesting..again...I love the way you let everything bleed together. -Morb
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On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, darkangelXlll
(107) wrote:
ok ok every-1 thank you tons for takin your time and reading my poem but i keep geting that there are words misspelled well thats because its ment to be like that. okidoki well thanks again. laterz.~darlin
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On Monday, March 29, 2004, nightshade
(118) wrote:
ok i hate DS he has such a way with words well you know i got two words that are better "favorite's list" hehe i'm like this one a lot
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On Thursday, March 25, 2004, yslehc
(334) wrote:
aw, that left me feeling saadddd.. thanks a lot! hehe just kiddin, it is a sad poem though, and i do like it
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On Thursday, March 25, 2004, Drea
(1388) wrote:
i enjoyed how well you described her. The emotions you convey here are strong.
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On Thursday, March 25, 2004, K_Love
(525) wrote:
I LOVE IT! Kirsten
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A former member wrote:
nice...very very very nice
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On Sunday, March 28, 2004, Anth
(1126) wrote:
there was a time when this poem couldve been about me(tho im a guy lol), but superb poem