watch the clock

By cre

behind closed doors
lock, lock
tick tock
watch the clock
play their games
close your eyes
bite your lip
try not to cry

scream, scream
fuck, fuck
scum of destiny
or just bad luck
watch the clock
count the minutes
do it again
your heart's not in it

choke, choke
claw the air
gasp for breath
stare, stare
smack, smack
darkness thins
wake up bitch
twisted grin

kick, kick
thud, thud
nowhere to go
nowhere to run
watch the clock
tick off the hours
die inside
devoid of power

slaughtered children
cry, cry
dream, dream
die, die
behind closed doors
lock, lock
please no more
watch the clock
ticking stopped
stop, stop
STOP.

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Published on Thursday, August 28, 2003. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "watch the clock"

A former member wrote: in a room, with death on its way. They stare at the clock as death counts down the time. Until it eventually comes..
A former member wrote: Reminds me of the times when i'm stuck in a situation where time is going so slow.. I want it to go by so fast and i just stare at the minute and second hand as they move, making that "tock" each time the minute is up. It gives me this image of a person i
A former member wrote: wow..i LOVED this poem. The sounds, repetitive words. Though i'm not a big fan of repetitive words, this poem required it. I loved the ending the most.. ticking stopped/stop, stop/ Stop...
On Saturday, May 29, 2004, KittyStryker (710) wrote:

this is depressing and frightening. wide eyed horror true life story. well done.
On Saturday, September 20, 2003, Blinded_Tiger (518) wrote:

...In incredible pain, Hopeless hearts of hope, They lost there will yet again, None left to hope but you and I, Of lost hearts we cry. Tiger
A former member wrote: hehe this was strange but very cool. it reminded me of that metallica song too.
A former member wrote: But...it's nothing like the song. The song is horrible! LOL...I would hate to compare Cre to that...Foolishness is what that song is!
A former member wrote: You know, I believe Metallica has a song on their new album where they incorporate tick and tock, the difference? Their's sucks and yours is awesome. While their song has a childish quality, your poem twists a nursery rhyme tone into something haunting.
On Tuesday, September 2, 2003, anathema (50) wrote:

the stop- the final noise... and then, nothing. it's chilling. this entire poem makes my blood go cold. well done.
On Friday, August 29, 2003, Six-Out (1423) wrote:

...Jane...I felt the pain in this one, the despair. Good write. But...I just wish you wouldn't have to go through it.
On Friday, August 29, 2003, CharlottesWeb (509) wrote:

My tongue loved this. Undying, unresignated misery without chance of escape...but with a resistance born of something unkown, unsaught...just there. I like...you are a brilliant one. ~JM~
On Friday, August 29, 2003, nell (270) wrote:

ohhh this has got to be my newest favorite work of yours, it has an echo effect almost when you read it, brilliant!
On Thursday, August 28, 2003, Chameleon (111) wrote:

This is the greatest piece I've read all week. You have immortalized the suffering. But its a story that has to be told. Great work.
On Thursday, August 28, 2003, OLd SouL (717) wrote:

Reading this was fantastic. After a few lines you catch the flow and get drawn in. You rock.
On Thursday, August 28, 2003, Ophelia (221) wrote:

oh my, Cre, this was heart wretching, and so saddly touching..........O.
A former member wrote: Wow... this was amazing. Breathtaking I would say. It put a million pictures in my mind like a collage or a time lapse. I love it. Great write hun. ^aura^
On Thursday, August 28, 2003, _Andrew_ (245) wrote:

wow... this made me go faster and faster through this as i went on, very powerful... i lvoed it, wonderful job cre, *~*aNDReW*~*
A former member wrote: i heard the clock and muffled weeping through the door and walls. i felt someplace. this is really cool