Dark Temptation

By Intoxicating Delirium

I gaze through the door at the storm coming in
The shadows are growing, making me grin

I could only imagine their threatening sounds
In this quiet town which darkness surrounds

Stuck in this prison what I'd give to go out
Experience darkness without fear or doubt

No one explores this blissful bleak storm
Just me and my thoughts, I refuse to conform

I open the door and everyone stares
How could this girl face those nightmares

A new sensation, a sense of displace
Lures me in, this enticing embrace.

A feeling unexplored by a girl with such potential
The sinister sky is becoming influential

Another step is taken towards malicious temptation
This alluring darkness having no expectation

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Published on Tuesday, February 12, 2013. Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"

Comments on "Dark Temptation"

On Saturday, September 12, 2015, darkheartmagic (81) wrote:

I could say after reading many works from you that tis my favorite one, this will be book marked. I love the darkness of the child opening the door to what the darkness sings,
On Sunday, July 13, 2014, mikeygreenleaf (89) wrote:

love it! fantastic word play/rhyme scheme
A former member wrote: love it. Great words and moving.
A former member wrote: A bedarkened brilliance you've casted. Clever verse and rhyme.
On Wednesday, October 16, 2013, M Morgan (198) wrote:

Better accept that . Reading you again i realized Why Not? Maybe it will be a good thing a good temptation!!!
On Thursday, September 19, 2013, midnights voice (957) wrote:

At least the darkness is all embracing , non judgemental , accepting . The storms of life bring fresh cool winds of enviable change .Disdain for what is knowing there must be better .
A former member wrote: Very alluring and enticing, one wants to dive in there with you, or rather to go into such a room, within darkness, within the most sinister, but which also seems the most rebellious. Nice.
On Tuesday, August 13, 2013, Scarrzz (235) wrote:

You have an interesting duality here, between the darkness of the storm and the darkness of the forbidden path. I always enjoy when one set of words leaves two meanings to ponder. ~ I too love the storm. Here in Colorado we have been having heavy thunderstorms in the evenings in the evenings. Yesterday I sat on my deck, watching one such storm roll towards me, feeling its wind and hearing the thunder. Amidst this tumult is one place where I can feel a sense of wonder and peace. Perhaps it that the chaos outside then becomes a reflection of my emotions. - I look forward to experiencing your other works.
On Monday, August 12, 2013, Peyton1 (204) wrote:

Marvelous piece of work! This easy flow and rhyme is why I love poetry. A short piece that tempts you to see the story that could unfold, I absolutely love this! I can't wait to read more. Might you continue this story for us at some point? It would interest me to see where you would take her. I have trouble keeping a poem short, once I start my mind just explodes and the pen struggles to keep up. Thanks for writing this enjoyable poem!
On Monday, August 12, 2013, kabacha (6) wrote:

just one line and it engulfs you ....have to read all your posts now... ....
A former member wrote: such soothing beautiful darkness love this poem
On Saturday, August 3, 2013, darkheartmagic (81) wrote:

Wow this is my favorite so far. I just love a good dark poem and you have such a way with words.
On Wednesday, July 31, 2013, darkheartmagic (81) wrote:

A great profound and dark poem fantastic read.
A former member wrote: dark depth, profound and pure words, walls that surround and go beyond despair. A very nice work Caitlinryen
On Sunday, April 21, 2013, Ortolan (214) wrote:

Great poem, took no effort to understand and held my attention ... entertaining and idiot-proof!
A former member wrote: Beautiful...I loved it. So many good wordchoices...
On Tuesday, March 26, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium (273) wrote:

Thank you.
A former member wrote: very nice flow, i like the non traditional symbolism of the storm being a source of temptation rather than a chaotic destructor
On Tuesday, March 26, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium (273) wrote:

Thank you.
A former member wrote: this is my favorite of your writings so far. you worded everything perfectly.
On Sunday, March 10, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium (273) wrote:

Thank you, this is the only one I've written recently the others are all 2 yrs and older.
A former member wrote: this is amazing, i love the way everything in this poem just smoothly flows
On Wednesday, February 13, 2013, Gray Vision (424) wrote:

This is truly remarkable, and you say none of your works are good? You know what, all of our styles are unique my dear and you're no exception, besides that's the beauty of poetry, we all portray it differently. Keep up the great work, cause I need to read some more. Thank you for sharing and take care =)
On Saturday, February 16, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium (273) wrote:

Thank you :)
A former member wrote: Honestly I think this is perfect I love it one of the best I have read so far
On Tuesday, February 12, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (791) wrote:

mostly love the flow.. but rhyme scheme should be a tool *you* use, not sommat that uses you... "sense of displace" feels forced, twould be "sense of displacement" does not appear to be a sylable count.. know ye of the daemons known as "feet": namely "iamb" "troche" and the rest of that foul ilk?
On Tuesday, February 12, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium (273) wrote:

Thanks, I just have this thing where it bothers me if a poem doesnt rhyme... I know that isnt right and there are alot of poems that are great that don't rhyme. It's just a thing I have, but deffinetly something I have to work on. Thank you for your comment! :)
On Tuesday, February 12, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (791) wrote:

my own personal demon is the sylable count poem borrowed from the japanese, haiku (575) , and renku (57577) but i do break out of that occasionally ... was displace the only rhyme that woudl work with embrace and convey the thought?
On Tuesday, February 12, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium (273) wrote:

I'm not sure I'll have to look into that. I honestly didn't notice that it was off untill you mentioned it. You are right though.