This Night Before Uncertainty
By cre
I hear the wind, sweeping past the lake,
And the sighing that trees in the evening make,
And the moon, in its usual beautiful way,
Is spilling like satin amongst the waves.
The air holds a bit of yesterday's storm,
Though the night, overall, is placid and warm.
Yet off to the east, the sky speaks of warning,
With flashes and rumbles that threaten the morning.
My mind slips to you, and my eyes cloud with worry,
Though I've fear for the future, I wish it to hurry.
A day's time hence from this hour's unease,
With time's quiet passing our waiting shall cease.
No simple words would honor the heart,
Of this man who has left such a hallowed mark,
On a world and the people who hold him so dear,
And a girl who avoided letting anyone near.
So I write with my heart and I weep on my knees,
I pray to your God, and touch my tears to the breeze.
It's not much to offer, but it's all that I know.
Please be well.
Please don't go.
Comments on "This Night Before Uncertainty"
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On Wednesday, May 2, 2012, cre
(410) wrote:
He died just over a year ago. Miss him still.
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On Wednesday, September 3, 2003, HeLlSeND
(40) wrote:
I teared up before i even got finished.......beautiful.......so heartbreaking.....i love your work...I'm even gonna sign this...word ~~HeLlSeND~~
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On Wednesday, July 30, 2003, Midnight Phoenix
(240) wrote:
I like the visuals and the ending of this piece. The scene feels familiar to me. The emotion feels even more familiar. Nice work.
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On Wednesday, July 30, 2003, Ravenblade
(307) wrote:
Very well written, I like the constant use of softer images and nature throughout the poem, very nice...I miss talking to you here, you're never on here anymore, or so it seems...great write nonetheless
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On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, diavolessa
(207) wrote:
Take my hand, and melt my tears. Take me to a place where angels sleep, and dreams are made of joy. Never let go, don't break me. eh...Beautiful...still that doesn't make it justice...I love it, I just do! {dia}
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A former member wrote:
Last two lines... don't fit the flow of the poem at all. Put them together? "Please be well...but please don't go." Perhaps? I felt the ending detracted from the rest of what is overall a great poem.
-SP
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On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, cre
(410) wrote:
ty for your input ... however putting them together like that would change the intent altogether ... as the "Please don't go" is in reference to being unwell and dying.
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On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, Ophelia
(221) wrote:
truely beautiful,
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On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
~sniffle~ You took me some where I've never been. To a summer night by a lake, a porch swing and beautiful scene that could never portray the straight, unconfused emotions of some one loosing a loved father or grandfather...or anyone loved for that matter
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On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
more to say... the vision in this is AMazing! I could see it, and I wanted to be there...I felt as if I were witnessing a pure, unstripped heart call out...amazing...simply amazing.
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A former member wrote:
jane i'm running out of new comments. this is . eh..words cant do it justice
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On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
This....just makes my heart cry. It feels as if you have put all of yourself in this write, and just wow. Jane, I think there is a new fav of mine from you. I love it. I don't know what else to say, I just love it.