This Night Before Uncertainty

By cre

I hear the wind, sweeping past the lake,
And the sighing that trees in the evening make,
And the moon, in its usual beautiful way,
Is spilling like satin amongst the waves.
The air holds a bit of yesterday's storm,
Though the night, overall, is placid and warm.
Yet off to the east, the sky speaks of warning,
With flashes and rumbles that threaten the morning.
My mind slips to you, and my eyes cloud with worry,
Though I've fear for the future, I wish it to hurry.
A day's time hence from this hour's unease,
With time's quiet passing our waiting shall cease.
No simple words would honor the heart,
Of this man who has left such a hallowed mark,
On a world and the people who hold him so dear,
And a girl who avoided letting anyone near.
So I write with my heart and I weep on my knees,
I pray to your God, and touch my tears to the breeze.
It's not much to offer, but it's all that I know.
Please be well.
Please don't go.

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Copyright 2003 cre
Published on Tuesday, July 29, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • cre On Wednesday, May 2, 2012, cre (410)By person wrote:

    He died just over a year ago. Miss him still.

  • HeLlSeND On Wednesday, September 3, 2003, HeLlSeND (40)By person wrote:

    I teared up before i even got finished.......beautiful.......so heartbreaking.....i love your work...I'm even gonna sign this...word ~~HeLlSeND~~

  • Midnight Phoenix On Wednesday, July 30, 2003, Midnight Phoenix (240)By person wrote:

    I like the visuals and the ending of this piece. The scene feels familiar to me. The emotion feels even more familiar. Nice work.

  • Ravenblade On Wednesday, July 30, 2003, Ravenblade (307)By person wrote:

    Very well written, I like the constant use of softer images and nature throughout the poem, very nice...I miss talking to you here, you're never on here anymore, or so it seems...great write nonetheless

  • diavolessa On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, diavolessa (207)By person wrote:

    Take my hand, and melt my tears. Take me to a place where angels sleep, and dreams are made of joy. Never let go, don't break me. eh...Beautiful...still that doesn't make it justice...I love it, I just do! {dia}

  • A former member wrote: Last two lines... don't fit the flow of the poem at all. Put them together? "Please be well...but please don't go." Perhaps? I felt the ending detracted from the rest of what is overall a great poem. -SP

  • cre On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, cre (410)By person wrote:

    ty for your input ... however putting them together like that would change the intent altogether ... as the "Please don't go" is in reference to being unwell and dying.

  • Ophelia On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, Ophelia (221)By person wrote:

    truely beautiful,

  • CharlottesWeb On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, CharlottesWeb (509)By person wrote:

    ~sniffle~ You took me some where I've never been. To a summer night by a lake, a porch swing and beautiful scene that could never portray the straight, unconfused emotions of some one loosing a loved father or grandfather...or anyone loved for that matter

  • CharlottesWeb On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, CharlottesWeb (509)By person wrote:

    more to say... the vision in this is AMazing! I could see it, and I wanted to be there...I felt as if I were witnessing a pure, unstripped heart call out...amazing...simply amazing.

  • A former member wrote: jane i'm running out of new comments. this is . eh..words cant do it justice

  • Six-Out On Tuesday, July 29, 2003, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    This....just makes my heart cry. It feels as if you have put all of yourself in this write, and just wow. Jane, I think there is a new fav of mine from you. I love it. I don't know what else to say, I just love it.


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