Anticipation

By Lylani

 Its that giddy nauseous feeling
Of half forgotten teenage dreams

Maybe you would...
...notice me
...want me
...love me

Maybe tonight
our hands would brush against each others
we would smile
and know
this is it

I would try not to try too hard
to be perfect for you
but I'd fail and find myself
falling
tripping over half finished sentences
uttered too eagerly

oh how I would bathe in  your attention
if I could just steal a moment of it
to steal your heart

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Copyright 2011 Lylani
Published on Friday, February 11, 2011.     Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"
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  • carlosjackal On Wednesday, May 25, 2011, carlosjackal (2788)By person wrote:

    Still really like this one :)

  • Sketso On Monday, February 14, 2011, Sketso (416)By person wrote:

    beautiful set up, tease and success, closed out with an "if..." You tell of the world that lives within a momentary glance so well.

  • Fantecstasy On Friday, February 11, 2011, Fantecstasy (120)By person wrote:

    The second last stanza is really brilliant. The whole thing is very good, but still. "I would try not to try to[o] hard / to be perfect for you / but i'd fail and find myself / falling" It's sequential and knowingly set up for that failure you just can't resist. Awesome work. *tips hat*

  • carlosjackal On Friday, February 11, 2011, carlosjackal (2788)By person wrote:

    Nicely captured. Especially loved the way you opened and closed this piece :)


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