What Death Of Soul
By cre
What death of soul
Beneath the softly falling snow
While skies of ashen greyness wept
So far above her as she slept
In winter's numbing chill embrace
What eyes did stare from sweetly youthful face
All banked in blanket snowy shroud
While muted cries dispersed within the crystal clouds
What death of soul and loss of being
Caught her here with eyes unseeing
Victim fallen prey to rehearsed sanctity
Collapsed on his foul sword of cursed iniquity
Lying then as only angels dreamed
And ebbing soul gave way to parting sorrow's stream
December skies in grief and lamentation
Reaching down with gentle kiss of frost's precipitation
To coat this death of soul with pristine dress of white
Though sin so deadly seeping bore its way into the night
Swirling pinwheels redly gleaming
Though for all the world she was seeming
An angel lying pale in moon-bathed bed of snow
Yet just a child now lost within a death of soul.
Comments on "What Death Of Soul"
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On Tuesday, April 6, 2004, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
This made me feel like I was in a snowglobe experiencing all of this. Your works often draw me so deep into them I forget that I'm actually reading something and not experiencing it.
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On Saturday, May 24, 2003, KittyStryker
(710) wrote:
gorgeously done as always cre... it's delightfully melancholy.
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On Thursday, May 22, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
I feel like I've just come upon a murdered young girl, and have seen into her so very dead but full eyes. And silence buzzed all around me while I read... I agree with every one else... a very low, subdued *wow*. ~DW~
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A former member wrote:
powerful beauty, only possible thanks to you jane, i love it
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On Wednesday, May 21, 2003, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
Jane, everytime I read something of yours, I have to sit back and catch my breath. The way you put this one together is just astounding. Seriously good write.
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On Wednesday, May 21, 2003, Saint_Reaper
(200) wrote:
out standing,well put....i would say more but i haven't the right words..
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On Tuesday, May 20, 2003, manywalks
(747) wrote:
Somber yes indeed, very beautiful and alluring picture you have painted here, excellent cre. ~ mw
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On Tuesday, May 20, 2003, FallenSky
(42) wrote:
very somber feel throughout the whole peice, i like those the best, wonderful work ~CFS
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On Tuesday, May 20, 2003, DoctorAsh
(371) wrote:
owe .. thats hardcore, a very complicated word structure in this piece .. released .. i felt like i was watching a midevil movie while reading this ... as always cre .. your pencil speaks