she won't tell
By cre
she won't tell
because they taught her well
and in her world of monsters in every bed
she'd tell you they're not just in her head
but she knows you wouldn't hear
so she sucks in all her tears
if she could cry
rivers might fall from her eyes
eyes that are sweet baby-blue
and she's just a baby too
hasn't yet reached five
but she already knows that being alive
is just a study in surviving
and sometimes living's worse than dying
her first attempt at the age of four
cause she just couldn't take it anymore
but the lake didn't drown her
and the monsters came and found her
she knew she'd never escape
and figured it must be fate
cause mommy told her god hates you
and that's why daddy hurts you too
and in the end, she'll be
just another tragedy
she endured alone her personal hell
and yeah, they taught her well
and she will never, ever
tell.
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Comments on "she won't tell"
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On Thursday, July 19, 2007, Reefer_rave
(139) wrote:
Profound... absolutely amazing.
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A former member wrote:
holy shit...this is fucking amazing...i got tingles while reading this....so so very sad
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On Tuesday, April 6, 2004, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
Writing is the best form of pyschology for me. It helps me escape, somethings, once they're written down. I can leave it on the page and walk away from it. Hope it works like that for you.
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On Thursday, May 22, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
OMG...Cre... you are so talented. You've incorperated child lingo and concept into a an extrodinarily adult reading work of art. You sense the child behind the words and yet understand the narrator is not the child...or that is how I see it... beautiful..
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A former member wrote:
its hard to describe how i feel right now... i have never had a poem take me to that level of sadness before. it made me think of all of the terrible possibilities of the humans, a.k.a. monsters.
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A former member wrote:
Great poem, you're an awesome writer.
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On Saturday, May 17, 2003, The_Scavenger
(30) wrote:
you are deffinetly an excellent writer. you've taken this tragidy and made it into a great poem. People that hurt their kids should be delt with...
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On Saturday, May 17, 2003, blackdarkness
(227) wrote:
i can relate to this...touching
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On Friday, May 16, 2003, KittyStryker
(710) wrote:
grown too young, we falter and we fall... in a world that turns the other way and pretends it doesn't hear as we scream for a reason to go on. another wonderful, sad work.
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A former member wrote:
Kudos for you excellent write!
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On Thursday, May 15, 2003, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
I agree with Doc, I hope this is fiction. Very sad story, it pisses me off to know that there are really people out there like that, bitches. Good write though Jane.
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On Thursday, May 15, 2003, DoctorAsh
(371) wrote:
what a tough story .. i hope this is fiction , not something that .. *might* have actually happened ... at any rate .... heres a cookie . wonderful write ;) D&A
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On Thursday, May 15, 2003, FallenSky
(42) wrote:
you've taken such a tragis subject and created something very beautiful around it, very good, ~CFS
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On Thursday, May 15, 2003, CorruptedLittleGirl
(243) wrote:
This is so sad... so good though. You are excellent, cre.