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skylite
By denver nitze
i feel my castle crumbling
and as i sit here
in the sand
letting the carefully sculpted pieces
...fall...
on my broken hands
i wonder silently
in sin
is this is my .doom!?
my fate
my curse
the end
is every castle i build
??doomed to fall??
is it the end
... or a ...
beginning
or pipe dreams
of a sort
in my tower
in this castle
falling down i do
!resort?
picking up the pieces
trying to fill the cracks
with every repair made
my tower fights it back
the ceiling is a skylite
the rain comes pouring through
i feel our castle falling
i'm inside
i'm falling too.
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© 2008 denver nitze
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On Friday, March 7, 2008, GraveFlower
(249)
wrote:
im sorry,,,,,,,thats how i feel today..you described it perfectly,,beautiful write, as always.....
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On Friday, March 7, 2008, denver nitze
(256) wrote:
unfortunately this is how i feel everyday. fortunately for me i get cheered up by comments from pretty girls like you. thank you sweets, hope you feel better today as well, let me know if there's anything i can do to cheer you up. :) ~ta
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On Friday, March 7, 2008, Moonflower
(301) wrote:
felt like a sad dream. i liked this
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On Friday, March 7, 2008, thelostmessenger
(112) wrote:
great imagery. nice write. loved the last couple lines, it seemed to speed up as i read them. *messenger
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On Friday, March 7, 2008, Dancing_Monkey
(1246) wrote:
Good image you paint here.
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On Friday, March 7, 2008, SGT Bloth
(163) wrote:
Never forget, dear friend, there are those who will be there to catch you,endings are only the quiet pause a second before your next breath, and new beginings. I hope what begins for you stays as good as it may be when it starts. Good luck my friend. Fear nothing. especially the newly risen Sun Uncle Bloth
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On Friday, March 7, 2008, Niemand
(361) wrote:
*trips and falls*
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