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Circle Yes or No
By Six-Out
The terrifying grind of another 6 AM slips into her shoes.
She is no one, outside of my mind.
And I'd leave her that way if I could.
she fades to black. the back end of another bus
and the pen. scribbling, ink to her skin- her life story unfolds
beginning a new day the same way yesterday ends.
tedious monotony. a life in black and white
as she closes her eyes, drifting to her lie. her written life
Truth she'll find today.
A car crash of imagination pushes her to paper.
Silent dreams are now her symphony of reality as
the pretentious routine of her mind is blinded by the beauty in her hands.
escape in the form of metaphor- and the world can hear her cry
a sullen sigh. replaced by 'once upon a time'
and her fingers plant miracles. full bloom- upon a bed of nails
as her mind dances to the beat of a broken heart
and [time.stands.still] within her fairytale
She is to me what reason is to life. -Holy-
A manifest of amusement is her palette of creation, she is not green.
She is fierce, a politic,
a bartender serving lonely martinis and heart-splitting shots of Never
Clear.
Poets Crush too easy. We can't stop falling. (in love)
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Co-written with Josh, aka Revolting
Theatre
Unauthorized Copying Is Prohibited.
Ask the author first.
Copyright 2004 Six-Out
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On Monday, December 5, 2005, MESUN
(230)
wrote:
well, seems everyone else has already said everything. but, yet another piece of excellence.
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A former member wrote:
I adore it. The last line is brilliant. I might like to quote it. For an away message or something. Let me know if it'd be all right. I loved the line "scribbling, ink to her skin- her life story unfolds..." Makes me think of myself when I write.
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A former member wrote:
You make our art sound so beautiful when you depict it, and you make the need for running so clear when you brush a face on it in syllabled hues.
I love your slideshow explanations and the way you manufacture thunder. and the ending ~ poets are such in
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A former member wrote:
poets are such interesting wildlife.
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A former member wrote:
"A car crash of imagination pushes her to paper." Beautiful. The opening line is perfect, pulled me under. And the final line cut my breath. Bravo!
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On Saturday, June 4, 2005, peril_notion
(88) wrote:
"Poets Crush too easy. We can't stop falling. (in love)" Never has anyone hit so close to home... I'm sure we all relate. Excellent work. ~Heather
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On Thursday, June 2, 2005, Mr King
(547) wrote:
brilliant... beyond that i'm speechless
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On Wednesday, June 1, 2005, Serenity
(469) wrote:
I cannot seem to find words to describe the perfection of this. So I shall say this was amazing beyound expression and beyond beautiful
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A former member wrote:
Lovely, and so very true....."Poets Crush too easy. We can't stop falling. (in love) "
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On Tuesday, March 1, 2005, Green-eyed Raven
(54) wrote:
I love it. *Raven*
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On Sunday, December 12, 2004, Northstar
(375) wrote:
*gasp*
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On Sunday, December 12, 2004, sIo
(926) wrote:
wow....
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On Wednesday, December 8, 2004, Solace
(1069) wrote:
Faaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaantastic...Fav's...
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On Wednesday, December 8, 2004, BleedSilver
(298) wrote:
Isn't that true. and I as a poet, have fallen in love with these words.
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A former member wrote:
"Poets Crush too easy. We can’t stop falling. (in love)" . . outstanding write . . thats all i will say, for you have rendered me speechless, as you do so often. Both Josh and yourself make such a wonderful team :) . . Rose
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A former member wrote:
i will be a six-out whore and a dirk whore, because i love your style, sugar. dirk whore zay
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On Monday, December 6, 2004, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
Well, this is my fourth visit now to this piece and I still can't get a decent comment to form. Wonderfully powerful piece, metaphor within metaphor very impressively done... I love the opening line; could quote too much. Excellent.
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On Monday, December 6, 2004, K_Love
(525) wrote:
"Poets Crush too easy. We can’t stop falling. (in love)" Wow... this was awesome. Perfectly written.. *favs*
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On Monday, December 6, 2004, BeautifulCalamity
(428) wrote:
"a bartender serving lonely martinis and heart-splitting shots of Never Clear.". . whoa, beautiful piece. written by two magnificent writers, perfectly mixes the great talent of both of you in an odyssey. . pain filled, just an amazing work ;)
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A former member wrote:
absoultely beautiful...wonderfully written
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A former member wrote:
that was beautifully done wonderful work
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On Monday, December 6, 2004, Rachel
(213) wrote:
Second comment.
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On Monday, December 6, 2004, Rachel
(213) wrote:
Now that I've gotten that out of the way... I can't really comment properly on this work. You two are two of my favorite writers on this site (you're both on my favorites list after all.) So it's not a surprise in the least that I love this work. It co
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On Monday, December 6, 2004, Rachel
(213) wrote:
It combines both of your particular writing styles in an exceptionally graceful way. I love it. Not just love.. I fucking love it. Everything falls into place beautifully. This is an automatic favorite. *clicks button*
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On Monday, December 6, 2004, Rachel
(213) wrote:
I want to say so much more... I want to comment on every line.. every word.. My words fail me, though, so you're left with this sad excuse for a comment. At the least, thank you for allowing me to be graced with the pleasure of reading this.
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On Monday, December 6, 2004, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
first comment
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On Monday, December 6, 2004, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
there... now that i've laid claim to this piece... i can comment freely. beautiful use of metaphor, alliteration, rhyme, punctuation... one of my favorite reads in quite a while... good work you two
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