Pier Glass
By Six-Out
nihilistic nonsense.watching with [bloodshot]-eyes
as the meaning of this /so/calledlife.:: beats the negligence of tonight
break me with these words of strife
killing moments (maybe time) with disillusioned words of _sympathy
underlined by broken.d raindrops/ livid with denial
nay-said with a [promise] on this s.lee-ve :of half-eaten candied hearts
gorged with a hole full of .flowers- in retrospect
it seems to may.be fit the meaning
.yearn for this new life of limited possibilities.
heathen-hoped in immaculate transgressions:; -babble-lipped and tainted
with love
intensify a nothing-life, [(heed these words of) simple seduction]
manipulated/ like a ventriloquist of the mind_ seize wounds of ///naught
circumcised my dreams with these blades of indifference
like memoirs of a dead man- these words fade
from the pulpit of a-nother plane/ magnified by un:opened hymns of sin
[everything seems so e.a.s.y...]-when viewed through another man's eyes
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-for Tim
You wanted sleep deprived babble, you got it buster.
And thanks to Corey aka Tracer
for the title.
Comments on "Pier Glass"
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On Wednesday, September 29, 2004, Ravenblade
(307) wrote:
Must say that this is awesome writing six...just outstanding, especially considering its "sleep deprived babble"...>Raven
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On Saturday, September 25, 2004, ColdScaredAlone
(77) wrote:
numbing. i love the pattern and flow, reminds me of my writing! :)
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On Saturday, September 25, 2004, A_Puppet_Show
(163) wrote:
There we go, all of the tired comments are out the window. You got it ^_~ A very good poem, and I cant point out enough how this is diffrent from the first ive read of you. Lets just say that your track is smooth. It will be. -Tiger-
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On Friday, September 24, 2004, knightmirror
(426) wrote:
nicely written my friend....this whispers wisdom....thanks for sharing...i alwaya look forward to more of your work****-chris
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On Friday, September 24, 2004, Whisper
(112) wrote:
Nice write, I had to tear my eyes away. ~Whisper~
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On Friday, September 24, 2004, ShadowFlight
(105) wrote:
a little different from a lot of your older stuff...I like the way you progress
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On Friday, September 24, 2004, Zhee
(529) wrote:
wow!!! this was absolutely brilliant.. each line was captivating... i loved the way this was written.
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On Friday, September 24, 2004, Anth
(1126) wrote:
these last few works from you have taken on a new style and direction,thats progression and theyre gettin better n better,superlative writing here,also your creativity stands out more in this style
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On Friday, September 24, 2004, manywalks
(747) wrote:
No, these words won't fade for quite a while. ~ wen