Chant of the Empty, to the SKY
By CharlottesWeb
Oh, grey skywho bores extensions of my
vision
Say you, what I shall be now, where I shall crawl?
What a soul I’ve drawn. A full hand of clear aces.
For you I bow and bend…dancing a king of sin
Why you shrug and sigh my life, I do not
know?
Blow the dirt from my skin, cry my soul clean
I kneel in this puddle offering so little, just me
For such wonder as you hold in your calm color
Bare flesh to mine, touch so gentle will
you find
Please give your beauty to this gorging blackness
Do not attempt understanding, nor waste light listening
I beg you to feel, feel my sweat, my soul, my loneliness
Want is plague disguised as life…give me solace
No want do I have…but a need of great demand
A friend, a lover a mind in my own, will sate
Alone I can not live…please I beg, feed my hunger
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Comments on "Chant of the Empty, to the SKY"
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On Friday, February 6, 2009, Cherry Bear
(25) wrote:
Wow! I have read many of your works, I have read others that no others have ever read. I have listend to your feelings first hand, but this poam. Well my love, this poem has my beating heart in your hand as I hold my breath in its amazement. Charlotte my dear you have done it agian, stolen away the beauty of the world to keep as your own. I really enjoyed this poem and shall read it time and time again. Your CherryBear ST~
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On Sunday, February 25, 2007, Disassembly Boy
(59) wrote:
I love your use of words. "oh grey sky who bores extensions of my vision" Very Beautiful write.. :)
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A former member wrote:
beautiful. this made me cry.
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On Tuesday, January 4, 2005, blue
(1409) wrote:
"...but a need of great demand" ...I love that line! ..this piece shines bright!! ~b ...and yeah, it was the title that drew me in... ;)
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On Monday, March 29, 2004, Johny_D_Lewis
(467) wrote:
wow, i hope your hunger is fed you both of you step into the light
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On Monday, December 22, 2003, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
brilliant.. Just awsome..
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On Tuesday, February 10, 2004, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
sorry for the lack of comment :O) I love this write. your wording is fabulas and the structure is smasing.. there you go my frined. more words of praise.
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A former member wrote:
Hmm...I wonder how I missed this one. I hate it when that happens. This is truly beautiful...and I can relate so very much.
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A former member wrote:
very, very true; though i find myself sucked back into extravagence from time to time. unnecessary burdens drag us down to hell. extremely well written
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A former member wrote:
And with this you have summed up the point of my life I am at right now. I know there is an ultimate plan but wish I could get a little insight. Awsome write. ~Urban Shipwreck~
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On Wednesday, July 9, 2003, anathema
(50) wrote:
this is amazingly well done... there's voices in here that speak louder than the surface.
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A former member wrote:
This is a truely felt poem..I almoust fell into your vision..I can almoust see it in my head when i read it. You have great skill. I have not read all of your work but ill be sure to now! forrgot_shadow
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On Thursday, May 15, 2003, FallenSky
(42) wrote:
yes, this is very deep, excellent work ~CFS
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On Tuesday, February 4, 2003, DoctorAsh
(371) wrote:
amazing piece D-w ... i love the density of this .. wonderfuly done