a paper filled alley

By Dancing_Monkey

"You look tired my friend". He trew the words like a prophet
"My eyes won't stay open", mostly a drunk whisper

And he pushed me,
Into a paper filled alley

"Comfortable" I mumbled.

Being stripped in what seemed like hours

The old news cut into my back. Dreams of war long pushed aside

He told me "Little princess, it is the flute of the watcher,
The dancing Martyr, one sneeky little bastard.

I never did understand what he meant,
But I never did cast aside - Chance

"It surely does not taste like a flute"
.A sour but sweet taste
Filling my mouth with what seemed like thousand searching lives

"It has been searching for the right mouth to blow it"
A grim smile, but somewhat sad eyes looked down at me,
So pure cleansed, A troubled mind put on hold for a second.

I did my part on this journey, sand covering my tracks.

"One hole makes a whole"
And he left me...

In stepped a man unfrightened to put the warm city light behind him
.Face painted black and white.
"It makes the common man, trust his beliefs on life"

He said so without me even saying anything

Picked up from the uncomforting remains
Of the worlds latest flaw,

His smile was painted wide and I saw his eyes the color of onyx

" Hind sight makes you nothing, but see the bad in times lost.
There was once a proud nation, we saw more beyond one' God beyond one' leader,
Beliefs seperated to makes alot of truths"

I wept and I did so for hours.

One question eating my mind:

Why do some think mimes fool, when they are able to touch the Invisible Wall

Right infront of you ?

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Copyright 2004 Dancing_Monkey
Published on Thursday, April 22, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • carlosjackal On Saturday, March 3, 2018, carlosjackal (2788)By person wrote:

    Crazy good. A straight up favourite.

  • NarcissusNarcosis On Wednesday, August 7, 2013, NarcissusNarcosis (94)By person wrote:

    This is an incredible story...doesn't even feel right to call it a 'story'; it is heavily poetic and thought-provoking...I am probably repeating previous comments, but I am a little short on words with this one. I read through this a couple times and I see it differently every time; that is something only the deepest poems manage to achieve... It feels like everything is on the surface, readily obvious, but it has great depth...your closing lines couldn't have ended this any better, it added so much to the overall point and impact...again, incredible work here. I will come back to read this post again, thank you -NN

  • A former member wrote: The last two lines hold the key that seperate the difference between prose and jumbled offerings, exceptional thank you.

  • A former member wrote: I love how I come away with a little more each time I read this...you sneaky genius.

  • Bluegirl On Monday, June 23, 2008, Bluegirl (177)By person wrote:

    Excellent piece! I loved every second of this.

  • DarkPoet On Monday, June 23, 2008, DarkPoet (229)By person wrote:

    Andre Breton, is that you? Scholar

  • Dancing_Monkey On Monday, June 23, 2008, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    Yes. *whispers from the grave*

  • The Lipstick Factor On Wednesday, April 30, 2008, The Lipstick Factor (287)By person wrote:

    This is amazing...i dunno what else to say...it's simply amazing...

  • denver nitze On Tuesday, April 1, 2008, denver nitze (251)By person wrote:

    i'm so glad this is back. what an amazing story. full of insite, wisdom, and lsd like illustrations/visions. you have a way with words. a gift. a-fuckin-mazing write!! ~ta~

  • italianbella On Monday, December 24, 2007, italianbella (183)By person wrote:

    This was brillant ...youre brillant and talented and everything ive read that you wrote amazes me...keep on sharing and ill keep reading:)

  • Bluegirl On Wednesday, September 12, 2007, Bluegirl (177)By person wrote:

    Beautifully written. Sucked me in from line one, and left me blown away. Wow. Well done.

  • Simply Me On Wednesday, September 12, 2007, Simply Me (40)By person wrote:

    This ones is amazing. I was drawn in from the very beginning and couldn't wait to read each new line.

  • A former member wrote: I believe this is about rape... But it's very hard to connect something so ugly to something written with so beauty in it's expression. well done FaVe!!

  • A former member wrote: self-actualization begins at the end of a fleshy flute...'Filling my mouth with what seemed like thousand searching lives'...this was mastered perfectly

  • A former member wrote: "In stepped a man unfrightened to put the warm city light behind him" I love the surreality of this poem, the weird imagery and the off-beat dialogue. Very well done.

  • vaultgrl On Tuesday, May 16, 2006, vaultgrl (185)By person wrote:

    .....i run into the wall everyday....great write...mimes are just lucky they can see it and don't keep making the mistakes of running into walls over and over....

  • A former member wrote: this has got to be one of your best poems ive read. love the idea, the way everything circulates like a molten elixir evoking images and forgotten dreams. Sureela and daunting, i love it.

  • Angst Queen On Saturday, February 26, 2005, Angst Queen (370)By person wrote:

    I...really don't know what to say...I agree with the others, this write is incredible...but...damn, wish I could think of something better to say...how frustrating

  • Forgotten Angel On Saturday, February 26, 2005, Forgotten Angel (309)By person wrote:

    heh..lotta comments..and i agree w/ almost all of them..fantastic write! i'll have to check out more of ur writes! -Kel

  • Lotophagi On Saturday, November 6, 2004, Lotophagi (333)By person wrote:

    I'm in love with this whole thing, the idea is just amazing..... awesome write.... thank you.

  • A former member wrote: very interesting, the rolling timbre in these words is fascinating, you really know how to paint a portrait of detail, and convey the meaning just right.

  • glasshouse On Friday, June 25, 2004, glasshouse (530)By person wrote:

    Holy... oh my. This was... amazing. Wow. I cant even... wow. Great piece. Great. *adds to favs* -Glass

  • BleedSilver On Monday, May 17, 2004, BleedSilver (298)By person wrote:

    Whoa...Beautiful, Peter. This was so diverse, But I loved it. 'Beliefs seperated make a lot of truths' was a great line. And mimes...Touching the invisable wall...That was GREAT. I Loved it.*Adds to fave list*~Mikey

  • urbanhumility On Thursday, May 13, 2004, urbanhumility (1158)By person wrote:

    well done.....your idealism seeps though in this one..........urban

  • _Andrew_ On Wednesday, May 12, 2004, _Andrew_ (245)By person wrote:

    The dancing Martyr, one sneeky little bastard. LOL, i love that line, this read was one of the best i've seen of you of late peter. wonderful. i came back to dp at a good time i suppose

  • A former member wrote: Ohh monkey, I've missed your poetry. This has a Matrix-y type feel. (This is old NightAure for quite a few months ago)

  • Dancing_Monkey On Friday, May 7, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    hey.. I do remember you.:O) glad your back . Monkey

  • Blinded_Tiger On Thursday, May 6, 2004, Blinded_Tiger (518)By person wrote:

    "Clarity in bottles, we got more then a few" I have been thinking, why we cant seem to save them? It is an itching wish to have. Yet you have become more clear.

  • Blinded_Tiger On Thursday, May 6, 2004, Blinded_Tiger (518)By person wrote:

    I am no more a man, then to envy. Especialy when seperated. Yet I envy not you, but the four hands that seemed better at saving ... That is true selfishness? And is it not ironic my friend?

  • Blinded_Tiger On Thursday, May 6, 2004, Blinded_Tiger (518)By person wrote:

    Alot of art and purity is seen here, yet I can mostly see with eyes directly at the writer. Some sight indeed, and more clear now. Last and most importent. I like the ending, you wrote it long ago. We all do. Tiger

  • Dancing_Monkey On Thursday, May 6, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    you blow my mind dude.. allways did allways will.. But hey the summer is upon us and you know what that meen. :O) *hugs* Peter

  • KittyStryker On Sunday, May 2, 2004, KittyStryker (710)By person wrote:

    mm. wow. nicely written monkey... you have truth in this.

  • Solace On Saturday, May 1, 2004, Solace (1065)By person wrote:

    Hell yeah! See behind the veil, open your mind, think for yourself, question authority...Nothing sings better than the song of freedom...Nothing hurts worse than the opression of that ideal...

  • CharlottesWeb On Friday, April 30, 2004, CharlottesWeb (509)By person wrote:

    It took me a while, at least the third paragraph to inturst my mind with the content, and then you did a 180, or so it at first seemed, and I had to catch up again. But at the end, and not only for the very last, very catchy and thought provoking ending I

  • CharlottesWeb On Friday, April 30, 2004, CharlottesWeb (509)By person wrote:

    I ran smack into it and I'm still not quite sure what 'it' is. ~JMDW~

  • A former member wrote: *sigh* What can I say that hasn't already been said? This is a remarkable piece. Beautiful concept...it's just..I'm taken away.

  • A former member wrote: WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT..You are a noble of this site, this...this...Is brilliant work, you need to get real. You are an amazing poet with amazing work...+T.P.U+

  • girlafraid On Sunday, April 25, 2004, girlafraid (479)By person wrote:

    I've been reading this over and over to catch everything that is happening....what a strange journey this takes me on...i liked it...thanks

  • capt_funguy On Sunday, April 25, 2004, capt_funguy (777)By person wrote:

    i told you already monk ... but an echo never hurts ... this piece is a killer ... a sacrificial romp through the dirty back alleys in your head ... yeah ... you look tired my friend ....lol ... greatness man ,.. funguy

  • Dancing_Monkey On Sunday, April 25, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    now dont go pushing dude.. and thanks.. :O) And I am tired.. damn drinking allmost killed me ..

  • A former member wrote: Damn this had such a back alley feel to it that left me a little disturbed. And yet this was still full of melancholy insight that hit me just right. Love the mime line at the end. ~Ryan

  • A former member wrote: Why do some think mimes fool, when they are able to touch the Invisible Wall Right in front of you?* I just might use this sometime (quoting you of course) =-MO-=

  • A former member wrote: Only someone with a blessed soul and a pure heart could have written this. You never cease surprising me... *tear* *Lilith*

  • sulkylime On Saturday, April 24, 2004, sulkylime (191)By person wrote:

    hah this is wicked , monkey (either that or my mind's always.. yea) but in such a delightful thoughtful way it sucked me in.. and i totally dig how you wrote and structured this, very cool..

  • SilentStalker On Friday, April 23, 2004, SilentStalker (1047)By person wrote:

    ...I gotta say, I like this one as well...you have a gift of writing so vividly...kudos, man... -Darun Scholar

  • Midnight Shadow On Friday, April 23, 2004, Midnight Shadow (67)By person wrote:

    Wow! This is something that I would read over and over again. I loved it. ~Midnight Shadow~

  • purr_verse On Friday, April 23, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    that invisible wall in front of you line is just magnificent... wonderful story-evoking and thought-provoking indeed. :)

  • manywalks On Friday, April 23, 2004, manywalks (747)By person wrote:

    This was amazing, a mind shake up of a read. ~ mw

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