Eclipsed

By cre

I want to be eclipsed
Again
Broken between the ends
Of lives I never knew
A bare impression amidst the greens
And concrete grey
I want to wane
In the mist of a noon after viewing
When the clouds weep
And visitors wear the crinkled visage
Of an interrupted sleep
When hands trail
And their owners linger at goodbye
Among these relics
And remembrances of life
I want to darken and dim
As shadows slip into the gloom
When the light has been removed
A blur beyond the lens
I am simply waiting
To be fading out
Again.

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Copyright 2004 cre
Published on Tuesday, April 20, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • LiP Stiches On Thursday, October 27, 2005, LiP Stiches (42)By person wrote:

    it sucks cuz i have nothing to say about this poem the greatness of it makes me silent with admiration...i never read a pom about an eclipse

  • A former member wrote: ahhhh...sigh...

  • purr_verse On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, purr_verse (1059)By person wrote:

    the use of colour/shade adds another level of effectiveness to this gently wistful and touching piece... i love the fourth and fifth line in particular... beautifully said. :)

  • KittyStryker On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, KittyStryker (711)By person wrote:

    i loved this in your journal, and i love it here. melancholy as only cre can do it... sweetly sad... in a way that makes you not mind the tears quite so much. they seem part of the joy of being.

  • Lynaes On Tuesday, April 20, 2004, Lynaes (859)By person wrote:

    A lovely, wistful write. Absolutely gorgeous pictures created in my mind by this. The feeling of wanting to simply disappear, but with beauty and grace. Fantastic work. ~L

  • OLd SouL On Tuesday, April 20, 2004, OLd SouL (732)By person wrote:

    *thumbs up* very nice piece.

  • Six-Out On Tuesday, April 20, 2004, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    *grabs Jane* Yay for new poetry. You rock, and this is no exeption, I've missed reading you....*sigh*

  • manywalks On Tuesday, April 20, 2004, manywalks (750)By person wrote:

    'bout time; though this was worth the wait. Superb aftertaste this left. ~ mw

  • DoctorAsh On Tuesday, April 20, 2004, DoctorAsh (373)By person wrote:

    well its nice to see a new work with the name cre attatched to it . this is very lovely. [D&A]


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