Baited
By flying_fox
You send me back to my loneliness
through the winds and the rains and the fires
no friends nor lovers are trusted
just myself, with my tired heart's desires
As I wither I fall an endless descent
I watch for the hands of the holy
But catch me they won't, for they're never there
Just the dark to caress and to hold me
So I nourish myself the way I know how
and punish myself with the guilt
I'm not who you think, nor are you, I believe
only flesh, I've no soul and no will
So tear at me, feast on me, come get your last
I'm sure there's enough to go 'round
If I seem to get empty I'll replenish it fast
and you'll see what a treasure you've found
But my warning is there that it's poison you eat
for it's ripped from my bones filled with rust
the distaste in your mouth from my blood will persist
and your Elysium will rise from my dust.
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Comments on "Baited"
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On Wednesday, March 28, 2012, The Black Lark
(9) wrote:
Beautiful. I usually have some constructive criticism for most things I read but this, to me, is damn near perfect. There's a contrast in here I can't quite put my finger on, and I like interpretive challenges. Excellent.
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On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, Mistress Morbid
(405) wrote:
Loved the rhyming in this one, it flows so well. Bravo! -Morb
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On Thursday, January 29, 2004, knightmirror
(426) wrote:
damn.thanks for sharing.
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A former member wrote:
Just great! Again...a wonderful rhythm is throughout this whole piece. And the ending...just love it!
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On Sunday, January 18, 2004, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
The closing line in particular is marvellous. (am i biased? hehheh) purr
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On Sunday, January 18, 2004, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
Enigmatic. Still has that whole "open your eyes" feel to it. I like, very much. good job. Welcome.