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Come Sweet Unknown.
By Dancing_Monkey
I stand here to challenge;
Intolerant
In desire, come sweet eluminess fire
Years of hollow eyes, lack of fulfillment
A seaker of wisdom, whereby need of awareness
Clouds do gather, be they blackend or not
Life giving whines become to entangle
My prospering self, dwell;
Shivering, as I seek
To take a stand, firsthand
A life of illusions crave for yet another
This burdensome task I wielded;
Upon myself, a extinguished path.
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Copyright 2003 Dancing_Monkey
Published on Thursday, November 6, 2003.
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"Poetry"
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On Tuesday, May 12, 2015, DarkPoet
(232)
wrote:
Just a test here.
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A former member wrote:
this is still such astounding hypnosis.....a falling through the reverie...a c.rush at the bottom, looking and blinking up in so much brilliance....so very pretty.
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On Tuesday, March 30, 2010, ubiquitoussoul
(346) wrote:
These are empowering words...that uplift me and make me feel stronger...I truly appreciate that.
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A former member wrote:
i think..........no-----i feel ..captured...engulfed, nearly embraced by this divine hollow beautiful dream you created; a wish of, a hope for, a need to. . .. holy egads. ... eloquence and reverence drips
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On Wednesday, August 22, 2007, carlosjackal
(3014) wrote:
Fucking rocked and not a line out of place. This was Shakespeare for the noughties, a cry to shake off our comforts sought from capitalism and head to a braver newer world. Wonderful :)
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On Wednesday, August 22, 2007, Mylissa
(845) wrote:
Exactly what he said...:oP Wonderfully done.
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A former member wrote:
And may I also have the strength to challenge... I usually don't comment where so many others have but I needed these words
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On Friday, May 18, 2007, thelostmessenger
(112) wrote:
i love the title and it really works with this amazing peice of poetry. nice work. *messenger
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On Sunday, October 23, 2005, Solace
(1069) wrote:
I come here so often; and leave so few words - what words could be left; not worldessness for that is silence - but perhaps an inability of expression - of complete conception...unknowing...
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On Wednesday, June 1, 2005, smearedXmakeup
(19) wrote:
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On Saturday, February 26, 2005, Forgotten Angel
(310) wrote:
"in desire, come sweet eluminess fire" heh...dude..i cant say anything that wont b repeated..so all i have is to agree w/ every1 below me -Kel
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On Friday, November 5, 2004, Sin
(1168) wrote:
wow, what can i say that hasnt already been said, simply amazing ~kristy
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On Saturday, September 18, 2004, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
"A life of illusions crave for yet another" - fantastic line; i love it... this is a highly excellent piece with so many images in such a small space; love the conclusion. :) damn damn fine!
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A former member wrote:
Jedi is right...the rhythm is perfection...it's wraps around your finger nicely...ever so smooth.
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On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, sulkylime
(191) wrote:
still it sounds like you intuitively know your path.. extinguished, is it.. years of hollow eyes but you're not blind.. only a brave soldier.. you're not taken back by the blackened clouds, you'll move forward.. the stand you take, driven by your unfulfil
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On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, sulkylime
(191) wrote:
unfulfilled desire is a fulfilling journey on its own.. whether to be doomed or not.. reminds me of the last scene in braveheart. that's my take on it. powerful.. loved it, monkey !
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On Saturday, April 17, 2004, capt_funguy
(778) wrote:
ok .... i got it ... ready , ? ... acupuncture .. thats what you do ... subtle pins placed , and the effect is felt elsewhere ...insinuation , leads to a pointed gift prhaps not even fully realized ..
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On Saturday, April 17, 2004, capt_funguy
(778) wrote:
like an insinuation .. a feeling .. projected ..this reads as realization to me .. but with a flipped despair ..a saddening irony .. but i dont look at you , i look at myself ... know what i mean ? .. very cool man ... funguy
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On Saturday, April 10, 2004, SilencedAngel
(52) wrote:
Wonderful poem. I truly enjoyed reading it.
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On Monday, April 5, 2004, Liath
(35) wrote:
Fuckin' powerful. Reminds me of myself, and how I feel, everyday. I believe in fate, and I don't feel like I have fulfilled my purpose in life yet, and I feel that I am unimportant until I have. You never know, maybe this is my purpose.
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A former member wrote:
Ah, the burdensome task we all seek to finish. I loved this. Your words flow so freely. Great work my friend, great work. -Doll
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On Monday, February 2, 2004, sweetambrosia
(80) wrote:
I love the disillusions in this... terrific write. --sweets.
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A former member wrote:
You asked, and here I am. (As if you don't have enough comments, you damn popular [sexy] monkey!) Loved the poem "Clouds do gather, be they blackend or not".. Beautiful line. Great write. ~Wish Upon A Star
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On Friday, January 23, 2004, Delphoid-Q
(213) wrote:
As always, you suggest without revealing. You try to get a feeling across. You have succeeded. Well done.
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On Wednesday, December 31, 2003, cre
(411) wrote:
Mmm. So many lines sort of whisper to me . . and as always I feel like I could read this write 100 times and find something new each time .. and you know, that's no small feat especially with such a concise write. Very nice job.
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On Wednesday, December 31, 2003, cre
(411) wrote:
I especially liked the "clouds do gather" and the "life of illusions" lines.
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On Thursday, December 25, 2003, _Andrew_
(245) wrote:
awesome peter, i can see you maturing more and more, not only as a writer but as a man in itself. your sense of feel interests me, nice work here
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On Friday, December 12, 2003, Amanda Parnell
(57) wrote:
*looks around to see if monkey saw I left a comment* Very much relateable. felt deeply within my innerself. *amanda*
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On Saturday, December 6, 2003, KittyStryker
(711) wrote:
brilliantly done. i like how this flows and sticks.
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On Friday, November 28, 2003, sole
(93) wrote:
This is written like a pro man. I've really come to love your style of writing, please keep it up.
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A former member wrote:
I still fuckin love this write man, incredible. ~Ryan
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On Monday, November 10, 2003, A Velvet Tongue
(436) wrote:
wow monk....this was a brick-in-the-face poem...smacks ya and all you can do is sit there in the sting of it for a few moments..I swear you get better and better with each sentence you write..Loved it...* 4 snaps..and a twirl on one foot*
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On Thursday, November 6, 2003, Aurora_Light
(472) wrote:
speechless monkey i dont what to say to this i wish i could have helped is the onlthing that pops in my mind wel done write
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On Thursday, November 6, 2003, The Fallen Angel
(235) wrote:
greatness monkey, poetry that tickles my senses...you know that I love this kind of brilliance, you never fail in enlightening me which only a handful have+Fallen One+
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On Thursday, November 6, 2003, Blood of Winter
(296) wrote:
this stuff would make great songs*still singing in flames style tempo in head*...
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On Thursday, November 6, 2003, yslehc
(334) wrote:
aww its beautiful..i agree with suicidal, i like your style too in general
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On Thursday, November 6, 2003, Mischevious Princess
(28) wrote:
Peter~ This is a very deep poem. i like it... and i also like the way you write your poems in general. keep it up with your style and you'll soon be famous! lol but it is a beautifully written and deep poem ~forever hiding in the shadows~ Amber
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