Heredity
By Dancing_Monkey
Search the shininest star,
Unknowing innocent eyes,
If you wish of one to guide,
You must travel life;
Wisemen saw the path,
Nature tells you of lust,
Find the strength,
Bearer of trust,
Rock the cradle,
Blend your tears,
A honest start
To share your heart.
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Copyright 2003 Dancing_Monkey
Published on Sunday, November 2, 2003.
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On Monday, December 13, 2010, man of decay
(58) wrote:
well written.
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On Saturday, February 28, 2009, Riven Waker
(317) wrote:
progresses in intensity throughout - also i like the juxtaposition of dar language with a positive message - well done -Ray
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On Sunday, July 8, 2007, carlosjackal
(2788) wrote:
=) Magnifico! Much wisdom in this small collection of words. -Carl
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On Thursday, March 29, 2007, Sin
(1135) wrote:
i agree with June...gorgeous..*leaves you nanas*
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A former member wrote:
This is gorgeous...inspiring. "Blend your tears"...I love that.
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A former member wrote:
This is awesome. *hugs* now you owe me a kiss._-=Evil=-_
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On Sunday, March 14, 2004, SilentStalker
(1047) wrote:
...hey, if he doesn't pay up, you can collect from me...hehe...
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On Wednesday, March 17, 2004, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
you .. get away now...
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On Friday, January 16, 2004, Storm
(143) wrote:
This was good, I liked when you split it up into two pieces with different rythms. First part was very striking. ~Storm
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On Tuesday, January 13, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
I've always been conflicted about the dichotomy of experience and knowledge. On the one hand, it's stupid to go and do something after someone tells you they've done it and it didn't work out well...
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On Tuesday, January 13, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
...but on the other, you might have a different experience than they. For the most part, though, I think the problem is that most people just don't listen well.
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On Wednesday, December 10, 2003, Delphoid-Q
(213) wrote:
There's one way to describe your work, and that is meaningful. Concise and meaningful. Well done.
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On Tuesday, November 18, 2003, sole
(93) wrote:
To me, this poem is about not having anything handed to you. You can inherit alot of things, but the one thing you can't is the experience that living life brings. Nice poem I enjoyed it.
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A former member wrote:
It's hard to open up after you've been pushed down so many times. But this is true...you must first experience to learn. It's just the getting over the fear of experiencing things that's the hard part...
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On Thursday, November 6, 2003, Aurora_Light
(472) wrote:
a great write froma great guy, wonderful job monkey, truely a write that fits my mood (dont ask)
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On Thursday, November 6, 2003, Blood of Winter
(296) wrote:
Bravo monkey, you have yet to let me down each piece a treasure...
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On Wednesday, November 5, 2003, WinterGrave
(258) wrote:
nice..vary nice..i think ill read more ofyour work.~~~Grave
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On Wednesday, November 5, 2003, SilentStalker
(1047) wrote:
...this makes me feel all warm and cozy inside...I can't be evil when I'm feeling warm and cozy...stop it now!...no, really, good job...I think Hate said it best... -Darun
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On Wednesday, November 5, 2003, SilentStalker
(1047) wrote:
...and there goes Urban, trying to make the comments once again longer than the poem itself...you always have a way of making people do that, you know...?
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On Wednesday, November 5, 2003, SilentStalker
(1047) wrote:
...dammit, how'd you fool me into doing it...? you sly monkey, you...
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On Wednesday, November 5, 2003, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
:o) silly fuck .. hahaha
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A former member wrote:
I wish I could comment like Urban :'( All I can say is that I like this. You say a lot with few words:) *Lilith*
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On Monday, November 3, 2003, A Velvet Tongue
(434) wrote:
I like this poem monksters...inviting, warm and honest...3 great traits..
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A former member wrote:
THis makes me feel warm a fuzzy inside, Beautiful Work!!
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A former member wrote:
I like the flow of this one. Seems like it started off calmly and then in the second stanza picked up pace until the last line and ended abruptly.
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A former member wrote:
As for the message my mind received from this- I'm seeing that in order to gain insight and knowledge you have to live, bleed, love, cry, hate, smile. Very nicely done Peter. ~Urban Shipwreck~
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On Sunday, November 2, 2003, yslehc
(334) wrote:
this poem makes me happy
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A former member wrote:
well i think ur poems charactrized by deep philosphy , and thats what gives to the poem a deep meaning well done...