The Lake: A Tumbling Tower of Ice

By Mute Serenade

A merrily marriedly saunter
Brought a paired pair of eyes
Our eyes
To a place where darkness and moonlight
Blend and bend
To the will of a siloed, silent lake.
 
We marveled (marvelously)
At the juxtaposition juggling
Warm air with thick ice
A reactive reflection as clear as glass
And we knew we’d found our home.
 
I, the panicked planner
Calculated weight ratios, sun exposure
And a tempered temperature balance so we’d never break through.
You, so calm and casual
Just started building an igloo.
 
My weary eyes waiting
For snow covered branches
To melt into dewdrops
An indigenous indicator
That seasons were to change.
 
This delicate balance of things
In our hideaway hovel
Trash towers among frozen flowers
Didn’t matter much to you.
 
Your love of lavish
Drew you to peer at distant piers
Far from our windows and fingertips
Like billboards for self-help books
Promising a better life.
 
…maybe you were just ready for something warmer.
 
So I neglected the thawing
Blinded my eyes to the weight of our burdens, bare
As I began my remodel
To give you something pretty
 
Tired eyes and raw fingers
Complimented the gnawing, numbing
Of ice water trickling the walls
Pooling to the floor
Peppered with red and sweat.
 
When all of it was through I carried you
Touting strong stems on tiptoes
Delivering you to your perfection
Every delicate step
Spawned a symphony of shatter
 
The tensile strain of our mixed intentions
Clashing with a denied reality
Juggling the juxtaposition
Of warm air with thick ice
Now paper, thinned
Bent and bled
As clear as glass
While the floor enveloped us from beneath. 
 

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Copyright 2017 Mute Serenade
Published on Wednesday, August 30, 2017.     Filed under: "Poetry"

Author's Note:

Ideally, this'll be part 1 in a 3 part. We've still got post-breakup fallout and adventures in dating to add to this metaphor! Woo hoo, let's make something perdy out of my collapse :) Also, give a girl some feedback if it's clunky. I can take it :)
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  • Jerry stiles On Sunday, September 3, 2017, Jerry stiles (235)By person wrote:

    Great write mute serende ,,awsumness at work here,,✨💃✨

  • Drea On Wednesday, August 30, 2017, Drea (1388)By person wrote:

    This was amazing. The way you chose your words and put them together felt damn good on the tongue. They just rolled around and it never stopped. You definitely made magic here and it's appreciated

  • worm On Wednesday, August 30, 2017, worm (1149)By person wrote:

    there is a LOT to soak-in in this piece! allow me to drift through your mind as I examine this from all sides... Miss Serenade, your use of language amazes me! Be Well! ~worm~

  • carlosjackal On Wednesday, August 30, 2017, carlosjackal (2788)By person wrote:

    Woah....This was the word shizzle that blows up the bizzle. Fantastic word play and flow. The whole piece is greater than the sum of its parts. Totes amazeballs.

  • Purposelessness On Wednesday, August 30, 2017, Purposelessness (143)By person wrote:

    I like that this seemed to end abruptly in one way, but imagining myself there it seemed to go in slow motion. Very well written, I wish I could write like this.


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