Whisper Goodbye
By cre
I'll walk past the windows
down the cracking sidewalk
kicking dried up leaves
the air is cool
but my hate is warm
and this party is catered by a thousand thieves
the wind sounds like voices
trickling down the alley
reminding me of twilight games
spotlight and fireflies
summer nights outside
laughter lost and never quite regained
I'll pause outside a window
reflecting lost treasures
joining the sigh in my eyes
the pane separates
the desired, the lost
from this receptacle of lies
the faded songs that fell
from the lips of loved and lost
so many smiles ago
merely whispers now
belongings of a passing breeze
reminding me only to leave me, alone
I'll continue past the windows
the sinking sun suggesting
cool will soon enough be cold
distracted by the dragging
tired feet on a worn path
and memories that follow
the wind sounds like voices
lingering and bringing
tears to my unwilling eyes
I will seek my loneliness
for all I want now
is to whisper my goodbye.
Comments on "Whisper Goodbye"
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On Saturday, September 20, 2003, Blinded_Tiger
(518) wrote:
In days of true despair, Darkness shall hold no relief, Tears will seem as acid, And wonders will be powerless in closing eyes. Tiger
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On Sunday, September 7, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
Curious feeling. So beautiful...your greif is in this work...that I find my self wishing to be in it...just to expereince the extraordinary sensations of something so....~shrugs~ beautiful. ~JM~
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On Saturday, September 6, 2003, KittyStryker
(710) wrote:
oh yes... this was a mournful wrie... and i'm just in the right space for mourning... well done, cre...
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On Friday, September 5, 2003, worm
(1149) wrote:
the haunting loneliness of this piece is enough to bring things from my past screeeeaming into my thoughts like a knife suddenly sticking me in the ribs... "thanks" (I think!)...
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On Friday, September 5, 2003, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
No
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On Friday, September 5, 2003, manywalks
(747) wrote:
Mmmm, never a disappointment to read you, and I agree with US, the second stanza is especially powerful. Lovely. ~ mw
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A former member wrote:
intriguing prose, i enjoyed it...Trichiliocosm
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A former member wrote:
Wow the entire second stanza really stands out to me "the faded songs that fell from the lips of loved and lost
so many smiles ago merely whispers now" Very nicely done. ~Urban Shipwreck~
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A former member wrote:
the first stanza seemed strongest to me. the imagery was tangible and i loved it all.
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On Sunday, September 7, 2003, The Fallen Angel
(234) wrote:
each stanza grew stronger and ended in the obscurity of mourning+Fallen One+
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On Monday, October 13, 2003, Lydia Jade
(1332) wrote:
oh wow its beautifull! ~Blood~