Driftwood
By Stephanie Sideways
Is this still 'fun' for you?
Coasting on the ride.
It's been deep here with me.
Now I'm washed up in the tide.
Crashing over rocks.
Could you not just hold my hand.
And carry me beyond.
To fall on softer sand?
I was struggling for air.
Whilst you washed over me.
I thought that I could swim .
But It's unfamiliar Sea.
I'm craving for the mainland
But an island's what I get.
Where my poor mind is stranded.
As it won't let me forget.
Could you return the drift wood.
That you stowed a ride upon?
And want the tide to take us.
To a place where we'd belong.
Could we stay a while?
Im not asking forever.
As I understand my rescue.
Doesn't end with us together.
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Copyright 2013 Stephanie Sideways
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On Saturday, February 9, 2013, dwells
(4284) wrote:
I just re-read this piece and it now speaks to me of a selfish male out for satisfaction while the lady grins and bears it (or maybe not grins, but bares it anyways) Am I diving too deeply? Cheers!
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On Saturday, February 9, 2013, metaphormachine
(133) wrote:
Mrs. Sideways, a conventional love poem, but nicely worded. Flowing lines and very nice metaphors of love, especially the term of the tidal fits wonderfully. I like the 3rd stanza, I enjoy that ... and the first 3 lines of the 4th, especially "I'm craving for the mainland / But an island's what I get." (ingenious!) ... which I find very successful. Last but not least you have found a great connection ... and an ending. Beautiful! :)
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On Saturday, February 9, 2013, FadedBlues
(2168) wrote:
...'hold me for a little while': is that ever enough to satisfy us?...
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On Saturday, February 9, 2013, Stephanie Sideways
(276) wrote:
Probably not! But better than nothing?....... Oh I don't know....
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On Friday, February 8, 2013, PoetessDarkly
(700) wrote:
love this stephanie, my favorite part was the last stanza. awesome work
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A former member wrote:
great piece, and I love the ending showing the impermanence of love and relationships
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A former member wrote:
the flow in this piece is grand.. i Love it! ahh why do I have no room for faves?!!! 10/10 thanks for sharing!
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On Friday, February 8, 2013, TropicalSnowstorm
(1703) wrote:
Love this piece! I've drifted too... Ciao, T/S
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On Friday, February 8, 2013, dwells
(4284) wrote:
You just keep getting better mi'lady and this speaks of much wisdom and heartbreak, watch out for the old clams in that sand!
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On Saturday, February 9, 2013, Stephanie Sideways
(276) wrote:
This was one of my first few. Glad they still stand ok! They were very healing. X x x