Breathe Me Whole
By cre
I pause, poised to descend
Considering such visions as the spirits wend
Touching the banister of burnished wood
Reflecting a world so little understood
Shadows dance in everchanging night
While whisper-figures fall and bleed into my sight
Steps lay numbered as the casing falls away
I pray focus though my memory fights to stray
The winds of past and parallel
Breathe past my ears in tales of something more than hell
And shuddering I cannot fail to see
That heaven too consists of such as these
/and I fall/
I see behind me, a rising lie's ascent
And I wonder at the scenes and all that life has meant
My eyes grow heavy though I cry to stay and see
And feelings grow unreal at the door in front of me
Openings encompassed in mind's most distant dreams
For every moment envisioned reigns evermore supreme
/and I fade/
Into this mystic's land that leaves behind the day
And shatters into sighs when at last we reengage
A world that most believe
Is secondary to all that seems
To all that grows without the womb of soul
Though I've always known -
/and I will always know/
This is the song that breathes me whole.
Comments on "Breathe Me Whole"
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On Monday, July 21, 2003, Blood of Winter
(296) wrote:
I bow before your grace, a humble muse and follower of your elegance.
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On Friday, July 11, 2003, Jonas
(715) wrote:
nepenthe i scream for satiation! you are achingly beautiful on your writing... i want to escape but can't turn away... beauty, this piece, siren's song she calls from the depths, and i descend
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A former member wrote:
this poem is very hypnotic and breathtaking. The mood shifts, and almost dream like storyline makes it very beautiful. :)
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On Thursday, July 3, 2003, SnowQueen
(59) wrote:
This is so beautiful. I absolutely love it.
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A former member wrote:
DW is right, one can certainly get lost inside of this descriptive beauty you write about here, although my only difficulty came with the sporadic punctuation, I needed a guide to take me over each line, although that's just a personal preference of mine.
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A former member wrote:
I hate not being able to write more than 256 characters. As I was trying to say, it's just a personal preference, but all in all, exquisitely done!
-SP
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On Wednesday, July 2, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
LOL! Yeah...but it looks like ya know how to get around that prob;)~DW~
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On Wednesday, July 2, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
CRE!!! Ummm... how ever do you find your way back to the surface when diving this deeply into philosophy and reflection? I will read this over when I am more awake. It deserves a clearer mind than what I am offering tonight. You are a genius. ~DW~
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A former member wrote:
i envy you're talent with words, every line i read i think to myself "i wish i'd thought of that..."