Painting A Broken Heart
By Lylani
We made love like a water color painting
Each transparent wash
Of virginal color
Making beauty out of form
We made sense from a distance
But the meaning was implied
From the outside
Who would know
The troubles in our minds?
That run like tinkling bells
Imagining clear waters
Slow running streams
Never hearing the crescendos
Of water falls
Or the power of the waves
Surging through our souls
But the picture was perfect
no burnt.umber. bridges
Just clear cobalt skies
To tantalise passers by
Into believing the lies
But the crimson of her dress
Made me a wash of emerald green
When she sloe your gaze form me
I know you've said it's passed
Paint a tree where she once lay
The paper's stained
With her desires
She's always peering out
I want to burn down the whole forest
With these raw siena flames
To cleanse myself of all feeling
Change the people we became
The things we left unsaid
Make puddles on the page
Swept away with an attentive brush
To form a tranquil view
Of watered down emotions
Of how I used to love you
Comments on "Painting A Broken Heart"
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On Wednesday, July 15, 2009, Scarrzz
(235) wrote:
Oh my word, that really is sad. The imagery, and the metaphor are beautiful, but the content is crushing. Don't let jealousy win. I'm so sorry, maybe I should just talk about how well done the poem was, but I know that here on DP the poems are stories of our lives. You are a real person, and more than likely this is your life. I can think of little as bad as letting love die and letting jealousy win. Turning away from a person because you found out who they are isn't a person you can embrace is sad, and if that is the case, then so be it, with all the pain that comes along with the breaking of a bond. Just don't waste something truly precious without good cause. No one is perfect. Likely, you know the reason he looked away. Was it a mistake, A flaw in him, or possibly he needed to be wanted and couldn't feel that from you? Most of us guys don't feel - can't understand - the love you of the fairer gender express towards us unless there is first some kind of sexual connection. That's just the way we are usually wired in the brain. *** In any case, you can see by my many words that your piece touched me, and I do indeed hope for the best for you. Ride the waterfall.
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A former member wrote:
:'( beautiful work.