Quiet Storm

By GraveFlower

i can feel you breath softly on my neck

your warm arms around me, carressing me

whispering to me how much you care

then,

darkness falls

and the light corrupts the sky

by vomiting impurity

revealing trees and grasses

as the sun smoothly drowns behind the mountains

the darkness comforts you and takes you into your dreams again

only this time you scream,

and the sun doesnt come to save you

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Published on Tuesday, March 4, 2008. Filed under: "Poetry"

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Comments on "Quiet Storm"

On Tuesday, May 14, 2013, TropicalSnowstorm (1580) wrote:

"only this time you scream, and the sun doesnt come to save you" - this is a great piece! I like how it starts light and ends dark. Ciao, T/S
On Friday, October 26, 2012, Star (879) wrote:

oh wow.. this is beautiful in a way.. i defiantly loved this.. well done flower (:
A former member wrote: Wow, I can relate to this so insanely. It really tugged at my heart.
A former member wrote: In aw of this. So many great lines and a buttload of viscous imagery. Lovely girl... so lovely. =)
On Thursday, May 20, 2010, lupus tenebrae (860) wrote:

Wow is definitely right, wherever there is light, there is darkness to drown it, well done, a very breathtaking read.
On Thursday, May 20, 2010, Dilated View (582) wrote:

Horrifying, sounds very lonely. Those last few lines were haunting, enjoyed the visuals you used throughout.
On Thursday, May 20, 2010, Gray Vision (424) wrote:

Oh wow, now I see what all the talk is about, this poem shows the duration of many things ingeneral, a balace between night and day in a sence. Great write GF =)
On Wednesday, December 2, 2009, TropicalSnowstorm (1580) wrote:

"the sun doesnt come to save you" - nice!
On Monday, March 10, 2008, Sketso (416) wrote:

'vomiting impurity' - powerful line.
On Tuesday, March 4, 2008, denver nitze (251) wrote:

and yet another wonderful piece from a wonderful girl. very nice write. ~ta
On Tuesday, March 4, 2008, Dancing_Monkey (1228) wrote:

Preaty good indeed. I liked the line vomiting impurity revealing trees and grasses the best
On Tuesday, March 4, 2008, whisperer (166) wrote:

*is in awe*
On Tuesday, March 4, 2008, GraveFlower (240) wrote:

........this helps prove that true love it thousands of miles away
On Tuesday, March 4, 2008, whisperer (166) wrote:

had to read it again AWSOME!
On Tuesday, March 4, 2008, whisperer (166) wrote:

i love this....it speaks to me like its my own epitaph....im faving it