As You Died
By SGT Bloth
I tasted your fear, as you died in my arms
You convinced me you wanted this
as you clung to my arm
You looked up at me longlingly
your eyes begged for my eternal kiss
You wanted release
you wanted to be free
you wanted power
you wanted eternity
I have given you everything
except the freedom you so desire,
you are mine now, your lifeless heart burning with my soul's fire
Though enslaved to me, you have been freed from your funeral pyre
Is it all you expected
It will never be
you will always want more
I have drained life , innocence
and made you a blood thirsty whore
I tasted you as you died
It tasted like you changed your mind
It was too late, then, to decide
now you will always be mine
Go now my child
use your new eyes
spread your new wings
learn how to fly
Pretend you are powerful
Pretend you are free
but do not forget
you will always belong to me
Comments on "As You Died"
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On Sunday, February 17, 2008, freudian-slip
(236) wrote:
vampires are eternally sexy. nailed that one. g
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On Monday, February 25, 2008, SGT Bloth
(162) wrote:
Thanks again
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A former member wrote:
we will keep taking, even after being told to stop. no one listens
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On Sunday, January 27, 2008, Narcissa
(391) wrote:
This rocked - I agree w/ circe avalon!
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On Saturday, January 26, 2008, Circe Avalon
(115) wrote:
rock on! this is a very powerful write, very good, and flow was nice too. And who doesn't love a vampire poem?
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A former member wrote:
Awesome write, very well done. Maybe in the third stanza the last two lines should be broken up into two lines apiece. I think it would help the rhythm of your poem.