city.park [at sundown]

By Six-Out






.take.

.takethepowerback.
we scream like gods in the sea.
the taste of opium in the air
like soma stars and an urge
to rage.

and I know I'm not a saint
in this pit. - like a bullet in the head
I'm drifting. feet from the ground.
tonight.

I feel.


and they chant. [fuckyou]
as we jump for ourselves- and bleed
our souls. one.more.time.

feed this instance.
and

worship-
the music.

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© 2007 Jon rodgers
Published on Saturday, October 27, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • jonLyndon On Wednesday, August 11, 2010, jonLyndon (113)By person wrote:

    "the taste of opium in the air " v. well observed & written...

  • ubiquitoussoul On Wednesday, January 13, 2010, ubiquitoussoul (343)By person wrote:

    The surge of your imagery,sweeps me off my feet in a powerful wave.Thanks for the read. Keep the oceans turning.And this reminds me of my concert experiences,and worded so well.Cheers.

  • A former member wrote: this reminds me of a book i've read... :)

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, November 28, 2009, carlosjackal (2788)By person wrote:

    Kirk's comment led me here...Cracking write and tribute.

  • Dei On Wednesday, January 9, 2008, Dei (663)By person wrote:

    nice little tribute to the Rage.

  • italianbella On Saturday, December 22, 2007, italianbella (183)By person wrote:

    you write with so much power in everything you write about so much strength and emotion in everything ive read of youres so far you are truely an amazing writer

  • capt_funguy On Tuesday, December 11, 2007, capt_funguy (777)By person wrote:

    i saw them at an outdor venue also ... they blew my brains out ... this was the most pleasant reminder .. thanks man ... great piece .. funguy

  • A former member wrote: You inspire me to want to L-E-A-R-N to write. Teach me?

  • PoeticHellion On Sunday, November 11, 2007, PoeticHellion (191)By person wrote:

    marry me?

  • A former member wrote: wow quite a different turn then expected from the title. The first stanza really caught my eye. The Smell of Opium in the Air. My body wen through a withdraw when I read those words and I smelt the faint smell. Live on...Rock On...Worship Music???? ][ ][

  • Mari On Sunday, October 28, 2007, Mari (419)By person wrote:

    nice.

  • Lynaes On Saturday, October 27, 2007, Lynaes (854)By person wrote:

    "We scream like gods in the sea." What I like about this is that is has power behind it, in so few words. Nice work.


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