Comments by All Members
- "Great fantasy. Cute rhymes. Reminds me of the video game, Final Fantasy. I guess I don't know much about Fantasy Lit yet."
Posted by Jonas Robinson on "Hollowed halls" by kenneth
- "Wonderful poem! This sounds very interesting with a threatening mood. Just awesome! =D"
Posted by Unknown on "Cowards call" by kenneth
- "I liked it, the piece had a good flow, I work at a train yard so tools and noise is always around me but I haven't had the inspiration like you to write about it. Welcome to DP."
Posted by Alchemist on "Anvils beat" by kenneth
- "Live in hope and die in despair. Only a fool, or an insane person, never wises up to the game - unless you refuse to play. Older and smarter is inevitable, and hopefully not too jaded or cynical - at the end of the path leading into the clearing in the middle of the forest (Stephen King "The Gunslinger" saga I think?"
Posted by dwells on "The fool" by kenneth
- "it all starts out so promising , then reality sets in and leaves you crushed...'thinking with my heart and not my mind' I had a tendency to do that...now I try and temper my heart's will , with a modicum of mind...but sometimes the heart knows best... :)"
Posted by kinkifrog on "The fool" by kenneth
- "Nice.... This had to come from the heart cause I felt it... I like that... And i feel like a fool sometimes just don't have the balls to admit it.... "
Posted by Devilish on "The fool" by kenneth
- "Interesting turnabout in the last verse, when the truth finally comes out."
Posted by dwells on "Good dog" by kenneth
- "Very nice effort, more upbeat (even if this is Dark Poetry), and technically perfect - well done."
Posted by dwells on "Charms" by kenneth
- "nice. only mistake i noticed was "falls" instead of fall. very nice work."
Posted by Salum on "Anymore" by kenneth
- "the beat echoes remembered :) ... I know a smith... love to hear the anvil ring...welcome to dp "
Posted by kinkifrog on "Anvils beat" by kenneth
- "Maybe you've found it - not the destination but the journey?"
Posted by dwells on "Desire" by kenneth
- "Welcome to DP
If I may...
In the first stanza you have an a, b, a, b rhyme scheme and you've written your last two stanzas in the same form. To make the poem flow better please consider editing stanzas two and three to fit the theme, then this read would turn from awesome to amazing(:"
Posted by Unknown on "I must feel" by kenneth
- "Yes! I agree, lucky girl... I have probly had that opportunity but I'm not such a good girl,,,=) But I congradulate success... Forgive my spelling!"
Posted by Devilish on "My place" by kenneth
- "Lucky girl I should say, for your are the sensitive one with a poet's heart!"
Posted by dwells on "My place" by kenneth
- "Aw, you know you won't give up now. We all need to be tortured by something from time to time."
Posted by dwells on "Broken dreams " by kenneth
- "Kenneth - you are becoming quite accomplished. This was soothing and speaks to the fantasies that sometimes linger a while."
Posted by dwells on "Those eyes" by kenneth
- "Hey Kenneth, save something for tomorrow. How about the third stanza, it was a little uneven. Consider the second line to read "And I will not fear danger" - at least it rhymes. An otherwise well written piece, and pardon the unsolicited advice."
Posted by dwells on "Weeping sky" by kenneth
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